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    dots Submission Name: Whispersdots
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    Author: sug90
    ASL Info:    14/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 69/93/34
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 172
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 606



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       I don't think this is my best, I just needed to write something, before I like keeled over and died.


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    dotsWhispersdots
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    Behind those tattered eyes
    Dark circles, the cover girl hides
    Love and life,
    The whispers she despised
    did you hear the news tonight?
    So and so died?
    Shot with a gun,
    Counting the dark days gone by

    The gossip spreads
    The snake always lies
    Telling tales
    Revealing deepened skies
    Wishing they could find someone
    A better guise

    Hon, people cannot hide
    Haven't you noticed?
    There are more than secrets tonight,
    More angles to cover
    When you play all sides




    Submitted on 2006-01-15 20:36:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was a really good read!
    it flowed really well, and it was like a mini story!
    i liked the lines
    "There is more than secrets tonight"- very powerful stuff!
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      The rhythms of this poem was particularily good - especially how the flow felt like it came full circle at the end.

    I was a bit confused at the line "Show with a gun" - a reference to television, or to one showing up someplace with a gun?
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by FrankBlissett | [ Reply to This ]



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