This read simply, yet it had so much depth and emotion behind it. I liked how well you managed such a difficult task. I must commend that you managed rhymes incredibly well. Since I can't spot any flaws, I will put this in my favourites. Well done.
i've read pretty much all of your poems.. and there isn't one i don't like... this is deep, emotional, and i was wrapped up in it within the first 2 lines. it's short and keeps you interested. if you made it any longer it would be a little tedious to read. but you did a superb job with it, and although i don't have anything to say that hasn't already been said, i just thought i'd drop you a comment, and show some support!!!! love your work!
This feels like the millisecond between "I love you" and "It's over" (or the aftermath of the two colliding). Very sad and beautifully expressed sensation of a love long gone but for a few golden memories (interesting that you'd strip sound from the equation; it almost appears to suggest suspended animation in a colorless world). This is a well written piece. Take care. Bill.