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    dots Submission Name: The Rising of the Morningdots

    Author: Heat
    ASL Info:    15/M/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 44/58/15
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1429
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 516

       "The Rising of the Morning" was written on December 28, 2005, and it was written to show that I was going to finally free my poetic soul out unto many pages in my notebooks, because I had not found the courage to do so, and a reason is because I had too many hard times.

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    dotsThe Rising of the Morningdots

    It is dark,
    When the poet awakes,
    To free his spirit,
    From all that destroyed.
    Not a single source of light out,
    Except what is shining on the paper.
    The words begin to captivate,
    And bring the spirit out of bondage,
    The energy is back flowing through his veins.
    Inspirations already being thought of.
    In the creative section of his mind.
    For the poet,
    It is morning,
    And he wanders about,
    For the inspiration.

    Submitted on 2006-01-15 21:38:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now this is one I can hold onto. It speaks to the soul.

    this connects deeply to my writing process and my feelings about writing. Where all around is dark regardless of the time and the paper often times the illumination. The spirit released upon the pages, a spirit in bondage. I do think this can reach even a greater place but it already has me loving it. Sometimes I am bombarded by those inspirations and the end is kind of sad to wander around looking for something to inspire, that is something I donít do, I usually get attacked by my muses haha they dog pile on me but this has heart it has meaning for me and I like it a lot. Like the title the poem matches its context follows well, a rising in the morn which doesnít have to be a life story. There is nothing for me to correct here. Excellent piece,

    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought this piece was quite enjoyable. it paints the picture of a new poet starting out in the writing world. it was absolutely gorgious!
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by the_forgotten | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely work... 'the poet finds his inspiration amongst depths of depression'
    i'm sorry but i cannot seem to get up a good comment at the moment (i'm at work and i have like 10 minutes until closeout )
    but i really do like this piece, i think it's my favorite so far...
    keep writing!

    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmmm not bad not bad!
    its good captred ur point a little edgy at the end but thats ok...good job!:) i think u dont need to improve on much!

    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Gini | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a great start but the ending seems to be a bit half assed. Though you might have worked on this for hours I say you should just work a little bit more on the end. But the rest of this is really good and I can't wait to see more of things you've written.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's great. It's inspirational to writers. To poets. I can feel the emotion coming from it. Kind of short, but some poems don't need to be that long, I guess. Great. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by KelseyJo | [ Reply to This ]

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