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Boxing Up Christmas


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
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Words: 81
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Boxing Up Christmas



Boxing up this years Christmas cheer
I stop to think....
Was Christmas ever really here?
Wreaths are dead...
I throw away a used bow.
I watch ‘White Christmas’
Wishing it would snow.
So I take ornaments off the tree
Childhoods perfection gets put in a box
Wooden hearts put away for the year
Not even those seem to last around here.
It will get sadder and sadder each year, no doubt
(They were right!)
I can’t even remember....
What’s Christmas about?




Submitted on 2006-01-16 00:17:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Christmas is about being reminded of how alone people actually are.
(Sorry, I have some unresolved issues with the holiday season.)

I enjoyed this.
For some reason, the line, "Wreaths are dead..." seemed to speak the loudest to me.
I guess it's because it sort of resembles my heart.

Anyway, this is excellent.

-nikkki
| Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  rws is right. It is all about the Cha-Ching! for me. Lol. I am juts playing. Christmas is about being around the people you love. Christmas is all about the love. Sure, some things may die, but the spirit lives on! Now for fixes.
Nice use of rhymes. Some of those lines were just out there, though. -cough- 4 -cough- And please, don't crush people's spirits... It saddens me to think that you are sad on a holiday.
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Sephiroth | [ Reply to This ]
  Depends who you ask. For many, it's 'cha-ching' as the hallelujah chorus (with debt, overeating and stress as backup singers). For others, it's a plethora of nostalgic childhood memories relived in every gift given and every smile shared. For an ever shrinking minority, it's the traditional birthday of Christ. For you it may be found in the answer to an old question, "What's Christmas all about?" (care of Charlie and the gang). You've made me think of everything Christmas used to be, interesting. Nicely done. Take care. Bill.
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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