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    dots Submission Name: "Before the Kiss"dots
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    Author: mgnola
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 25/25/14
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       tension of opposites (scientific).
    nothing. absolutely nothing - like the millisecond, the force of magnetism - before the first kiss.


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    dots"Before the Kiss"dots
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    so it all begins
    in the Rohrschach
    space between
    our lips
    leaning towards like
    a universal
    order.

    who could walk away
    when a trillion
    positrons synaptically
    collide into
    your nuclide electrons.
    both annihilate
    so as to create.
    my holes design
    desires your
    matter will fit.

    it's all in the lips
    whether we like it or not.

    before you lock me
    out of the world as i know it -
    let's swim in the dance
    of who's pulling who -

    before we see how our mouths fit,
    before we seal the deal,
    let's prolong that infinite air
    before the deed is done,
    before life as we know it
    grows into a revised tale.

    in that space between our kiss
    one could see a planet,
    deserts roll between lover's mouths,
    a mountain moves,
    skies surrender in the dust
    of a '65 mustang,
    why not pull out in the nick of time,
    deny the law of creation.

    just know there are a gaggle of beings
    like immigrants
    face to gate,
    wait for falcon dive,
    the salmon's last leap,
    and another bodyless soul
    squirms to exist -
    and we spark our way into 3-D.

    it must be the search for suction,
    the way a playful mouth pulls
    away with a load of
    pulpy plum ,
    we just cannot deny
    that sweet tear
    of meat from seed,
    our mouth the plum,
    the plum our mouth,
    and the neurological chin quiver
    remembers the breast.
    and the shaking sigh
    like the end of the deepest cry.

    locked lips plump up -
    what pulp have we pulled
    from another's soul
    at the end of a kiss?

    then why do we begin
    so watery
    so wombed
    when leaving
    so ashen
    so dust?

    Mimi Gauthier
    Mir I Am




    Submitted on 2006-01-16 00:54:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You know, I just liked reading this... awesome concepts and imagery - I'm interested in quantum physics and astronomy and universal laws etc... they're all theories that have yet to be disproved though, not concrete fact... nothing ever is. But I'm digressing lol.

    Perhaps a comma or two in your first stanza? That's all I can suggest to improve... but otherwise, no nitpicks... as I said it was marvellous to read.

    Awesome stuff.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      A jolting dose of suspended animation in the millisecond before lovers sample one another (it appears all creation hovers round you as you hesitate at the crossroad between logic and biologic). Id say you stirred a huge pot of sensuality and science and came up with a wild examination of magnetism and 'animal attraction' with a little twist of irony for good measure. This was beautifully done and thoroughly engaging from beginning to end. Take care and keep posting. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      There seem to be alot of double entendres in here. Maybe I'm imagining them because I'm focusing on them in English class right now, but I definitely see them. The imagery is good, and it flows well from line to line. It seems so scientific that it sucks all the emotion out of the piece. It's an original take, and I like it.
    -HaldirLives
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]



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