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    dots Submission Name: Universal Rulesdots
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    Author: toyysruss
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    Words: 127
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       I'm going straight to hell.

    I'm already hot


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    toyysruss


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    dotsUniversal Rulesdots
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    The good things in life,
    are sometimes.
    And the bad things in life,
    occur all the time.
    So needless to say,
    I don't wear a watch,or have a calender
    I do not measure,I just question.

    What goes up,must come down.
    Why?
    A rollercoaster ride,it all becomes for me
    It would be much easier for me,
    Too stay either or.
    So i try my best to stay down.
    I was not provided with wings.
    This I do not question.
    But I'm asking something.

    Why can't anything be done without a fight?
    In my head.
    In this world.
    In this universe.
    And I question
    The creator of all this.Let me see the rule book.
    Who's the author?Are you surrounded in misery?

    Yes I am





    Submitted on 2006-01-16 00:57:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was really great. I question the same thing. I wonder why life can't just be all wonderful, or a piece of shiit. The continuing switch between the two is heart breakng. Its annoying, and a pain in the ass. This questions all of that and the way it is written is very original. wonderful job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem. i loved how at first it was like you were questioning the higher power, and then at the end you revealed that you created your life, that you made your own rules and are now restricted by them. i could relate a lot.

    ~sabrina
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by icaughtfire591 | [ Reply to This ]
      very thoughtful, introspective piece. I'd fix some minor things only: you can get rid of most of the commas, as they're not necessary and drop one of the 'for me's you have in lines 10 and 11.

    to reformat for you:

    The good things in life
    are sometimes.
    And the bad things in life
    occur all the time.
    So needless to say,
    I don't wear a watch or have a calendar
    I do not measure,I just question.

    What goes up,must come down.
    Why?
    A rollercoaster ride it all becomes
    It would be much easier for me
    To stay either/or.
    So i try my best to stay down.
    I was not provided with wings.
    This I do not question.
    But I'm asking something:

    Why can't anything be done without a fight?
    In my head.
    In this world.
    In this universe.
    And I question
    The creator of all this.
    Let me see the rule book.
    Who's the author?
    Are you surrounded in misery?

    Yes I am.

    just some minor cleaning up!! I really like the thinking behind this. well done.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. what goes up must come down, but what happens when something never goes up? does it fall into the darkness of hell? I liked this. It offers insight into what everyone does once in a while, questions the authority, questions their higher power. Existentialism. I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Eah | [ Reply to This ]


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