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    dots Submission Name: Beauty?dots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       This was imspired by a turning point in my life, which was largely brought on by writing and helped cause my love of writing. It is preceded by 'Mastery of My Emotions'.


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    dotsBeauty?dots
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    Beauty in the eye?
    What window to the soul?
    An organ only,
    Designed for sight.
    Not even sight,
    But a representation
    Of what the world is.
    A mischievious glance,
    No, muscles moving flesh.
    What do you see in it?
    Show me,
    I long to know
    Beauty.




    Submitted on 2006-01-16 13:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, another piece in which you don't faulter.
    Although this piece is rather short, the descriptive nature brought me a wealth of thoughts. I can always tell if i like a poem because i somehow get lost in it and then re-read a few times before i post comment.
    As for constructive critism, my friend i can't offer you any, i've never written such an enchanting piece as this.
    Great write don't change a thing
    A Loving Hatred
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by ALovingHatred | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent poem although I am unsure how it relates to your poem "Mastery of Emotion." i liked your use of alliterations such as "organ only" and " musle moving flesh." It really helped to keep the poem moving smoothly. I also think that your line " designed for sight, not even sight " is strong. The way I interpted this was that you made the statement then immediately upon speaking it you retracted it realising that there was so much more depth to what you were actually saying. Anyway that is jsut the way that I read it. Great poem I liked it a lot.
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Rosh_5 | [ Reply to This ]


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