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Submission Name: You're unforgetable dots

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Author:	I_m not Broken
ASL Info:	17/F/IDK
Elite Ratio:	2.75 - 91/98/68
Words:	78

Class/Type:	Poetry/Passion
Total Views:	238
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	488

Description:
My boyfriend just gave my ring to another girl.....so i was pretty sad

You're unforgetable dots

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Meloncholy rain crashes, my tears fall
Crimson like the roses you gave to me
Your secrets safe, at least you thought it was
You love is a plauge, killing me slowly
Your kiss is a poison, driving me insane
I'm through thinking of things to say to you
My disadvantage was I never knew
You love was always just a falsity
You truths were all lies, I loved you anyway
Wishing to forget, but you're unforgettable

Submitted on 2006-01-16 14:24:58 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really love this poem. It' very good and the way it was written was so intricate. The ending was so bitter...not bittersweet, just flat out bitter. Job well done.
| Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you used really nce words to express yourself. I really like the first two lines. I had a love that treated me like [censored] and I wanted to forget about but just couldn't. Great job as usual
| Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by melody10977 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a really good, emotional poem that really made me feel like I want to punch this guy in the gaping hole in the middle of his face. This poem was way better than the other one I read. It reminded me of him, and how i'm angry because i can't have him. This sort of relates with how you're feeling. Great job!
alyssa
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the line, "Wishing to forget, but you unforgettable." I've been through some relationships like that!
That just rang out for me. Sounds like he's one you are better off without & I liked this piece from you.
Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
tif
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  well hes an ass whole isnt he why in the hell. any way too the poem i like it i really do . it seems to me you can make anything haunting .
verry good love

xoxo
that girl
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
  I really love this poem. It's deep and meaning full, full of emotion. I love it and it is going into my fav's. I think that the only thing you need to do it look over grammer errors. Other then that it's wonderful. Take care.

Thorn XxX
| Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]

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