Description: "One More Chance" was written on December 29, 2005. I wrote this poem because I flopped a lot in poetry because of a lot of bad times, and I really wasn't able to free my spirit, so I wanted one more chance, and I seem to be doing great.
One More Chance -------------------------------------------
Give me one more chance,
And I'll try again.
I'll make sure that I won't flop,
As I did before.
I don't feel any reason to fail,
Because I long to be free.
When I reach my point,
I will break the chains,
That have kept me silent.
First of all, I would like to thank you... really thank you, for commenting on my piece entitled My Heart Is A Soldier. I greatly appreciated your kind words. I'm also flattered that you decided to add the piece to your favorites list. Thank you so much. I'm sad to say that my other pieces, so far, are probably not as impressive as that one piece. I'm not sure, maybe it's because that piece was lyrics rather than a poem. I dunno? Thank you though, I will definitely continue to write other pieces such as that. Lyrical seems to work for me.
Now, however, I would like to comment on one of your pieces... The title of this particular piece caught my eye and my interest. In reading it, I had numerous flashbacks of memories rush through my mind. It reminds me of how precious and important second chances are, and what an impact and growth they can offer. Now, in your case, the second chance is not life-threatening or anything that serious. However, still important and longed for.
The beauty of this piece you have written is that it can be protrayed about almost anything. ...which means that almost everyone can relate to it. The simplicity of the words and the piece itself is what makes it unique.
i kinda felt like there should be more to this write. and the whole "Flop" thing kinda makes you sound like a fish outta water... meaning it seems to not fit with the tone of the poem. But other that that i really liked it!<33
short and sweet... i feel like this in my poetry all the time... i hold no illusions for myself, i know what i am and that is not a master of words. but sometimes we do things just for the enjoyment and not for the approval of others. okay, sorry, i don't know what that has to do in relation with your piece, it just kinda came out. sorry about that
your piece is nice and simplistic and it gives off a nice feeling. keep writing
Submission Name: One More Chance
