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    dots Submission Name: Are you seriousdots
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    Author: musclebound350
    ASL Info:    26/male
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 197/202/70
    Words: 606
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 914
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    Bytes: 3662



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    dotsAre you seriousdots
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    This is life in the times
    of the hatred and crime
    I'm writin these lyrics to ease my mind
    of all these things inside
    that collide and combine

    and I dont know why but I
    worry about things in life
    and analyze everything I can put to my mind
    like anything and everything
    which means im screwed
    because there's so many people and things to think of
    even you
    yeah you, you know who
    a close friend till the end
    no fakin.... none of it's pretend
    and I'll always love you
    at either season, time or weather
    could someone seperate us... Never

    truley I hope you know
    I'll never let you go
    But you already know I'm too young and your too old
    so we could never be like we'd hope
    to be with someone thats just so close

    (chorus)
    Everyday of my life I think of you and I
    and I hope we stay together
    friends forever
    cause life is so much better
    now that I met you
    cause you know I like you
    and I'll never leave you
    or lie and decieve you

    Everyday of my life I think of you and I
    and I hope we stay together
    friends forever
    cause life is so much better
    now that I met you
    cause you know I like you
    and I'll never leave you
    or lie and decieve you
    (end chorus)


    Ever since I met you
    my mind has kept racing
    but now with more thoughts
    my mind is aching
    my problems with your problems we keep exchanging

    I wish I could help
    but I dont know what to do
    constantly on my mind I think of you
    I would do anything to take away
    the burdens of your present and past
    I really would but I dont know how to ask
    So please tell me so I can help you with that

    I dont know why but im just that kinda guy
    that would never lie
    whipe them tears away from your eyes
    and show you a new life and open your eyes
    to new thoughts and opportunities
    and show you how life really should be

    and I can show you the world
    your such a beautiful girl
    but have trouble findin a guy which is so obscured
    cause I know you'd rock there world
    and you'll someday find that guy to make you his wife
    and you'll be livin it up havin a wonderful life

    (chorus)

    so I end this tryn to say
    how I really feel today
    cause you play a special role in my life today
    I hope you can see this way
    wishin that we could be together
    but dont know if we'll ever
    get together as two friends
    who like each other
    but if you dont want it
    then I dont want it
    because it aint something you can see workin
    and ya know thats cool I can live with that
    as long as we have an understanding of that
    as long as we can stay friends till the end
    livin together cause you know I'll never hurt you
    all I want is to be there with you
    be there for you
    through the good times and the bad
    to make you smile when you sad
    and calm you when your mad
    just being around you make me glad
    and if you ever need to call someone I'll be there
    I'll drive down to see you any where
    dont matter how near or far
    early or late
    you can count on my being there for you any day




    Submitted on 2006-01-16 18:35:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It is a bit long, but, I find no fault with it. Truth is I don't read that many lyrics but it seems to me you have gitten your point accross and told your story, so I can't say that I would change anything about it.
    Take care,
    !doc'
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good! I loved it! You had a great flow going on here...don't know why but I could hear Linkin Park or some body doing this one. You know how they do. Maybe...LFMAO!

    This was great though. I think you deserve more attention then you get!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      its sooooooo long haha but i did read through it and i did enjoy it. it caught me off guard at the beginning because i thought you were...i dont know, being emo i guess and whining about life...but then i see you're talking about love and friendship. it was surprising. i can hear a tune in my head for it, but i dont think i could translate it onto my guitar just yet. but its nice.
    <!>catie
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]


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