Description: its just something that i wrote and hung on my door
These Walls -------------------------------------------
The secrets that these walls
hold are secret even to me.
The darkness that lies behind
this door is the same that
dwells within your mind.
So if nightmares plauge you
Do Not enter unless you plan
to face them for real
Very cool, I agree with Bleeding Tears, definitly trippy. I think you should move some of the words into different lines, such as moving hold up to the first line: "The secrets that these walls hold are secret even to me."
this is cool...i think its pretty trippy but thats what i like about it. yah i think thats cool how you said you put it on your door and yah.. it does make some kind of mystery and thats the best part. its pretty short so i dont know what to say
Pretty good poem though the ending wasn't that great. It seemed like the whole thing was building up for something and then just kinda let us down with the last part. Other then that good job
i really like this piece...its short and to the point. it is full of emotion and truth. i can totally relate to this and everyone else probably can too. casue no matter how much we try to act normal, we all have secrets that we hide.
Short and sweet... thats right! It was short but absolutely friggin awesome! it was really a great write. i love the darkness in your words and the scaryness to the flow... definitely a great read! great job!
Submission Name: These Walls
