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    dots Submission Name: Scarletdots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 763
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Eyes looking into
    the untasted depth
    of my only scarlet.
    Your elegance
    beyond mere imagination
    I submit to your

    You are a temptation
    bathed in beauty
    and scented in pure
    passion. Basked
    in sanctity you
    glow against
    dimmed lights.

    How you danced
    around in grace,
    naive of
    your fragile state.
    You continue to
    seduce this drifter-
    jaded but carefree.

    But then, hands
    began to hold you
    and took advantage
    of your vulnerability.
    Slowly he tasted
    you. His lips lingered-
    the aftermath of your sin.

    Eyes looking through
    the unsweetened depth
    of my only scarlet.
    My mistake.
    She was never mine
    all along. Scarlet,
    emptied wine bottle.

    Submitted on 2006-01-16 23:31:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The emotions are lined up: gentleness, admiration, passion, dissapointment and loss for the end. A really emotional and expressive piece. Your choice of words and how you combined them made this poem very tangible and easy to imagine. Great idea poured into a great work of poetry.
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      this has a lot of passion and like how you describe whatever you mind opens up to after you read it .
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by urbanguttah | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. The imagery is interesting and classic. No food or drink is as connected to the history of good poetry as wine. It's difficult to give it a fresh look, but you've definitely done it. Really good. And the meaning, I have no idea if I'm right. I won't even speculate.
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]

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