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    dots Submission Name: Two Halvesdots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1339
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    Bytes: 1308



    Description:
       Just tryin to get back toward my old style...


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    dotsTwo Halvesdots
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    Sippin Coor's light till I'm feelin half right,
    till it's feelin like my sight can see through the dark night -
    Past all the shadows,
    To the battles to come.
    And back to the days playin
    Rattles and drums
    I stay low on the bull
    Cuz the cattle are dumb,
    Barely half my match when I was
    Sucking my thumb -
    Still not my match when I'm
    Suckin in rum
    So my balls big whether or not I'm
    Tucking guns.
    Compare that to cats who only rap about gats,
    Who only play slapbacks if they know they can blast -
    The same way rats only attack when en masse
    the same way hyenas gotta come out in packs.
    But I'm a lone wolf
    Neva shook
    Neva brook -
    Any disrespect
    Leads to life gettin took.
    Still I read alot of books
    to be a cultured gentleman -
    Brains make up for numbers
    And there's more simpletons -
    So I stick to simple sins
    And try to stay outta prison,
    Cuz I can't see my vision if I can't keep livin
    Though my paths are like a prism -
    With a million different paths
    There's still just me and the world
    So that means only two halves.




    Submitted on 2006-01-16 23:32:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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