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    Author: Lady Almira
    ASL Info:    16 Female Redding Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/37/17
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 177
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1097



    Description:
       This is how I feel about a guy I just really got involved with, I have liked him for a while and things are little rocky for us but I want it to work...this is kind of a vent, kind of a ramble........


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    With every word that you whisper
    I sink just a little deeper
    I drink in your soft voice
    Losing all will, all choice

    With every time that we touch
    my heart speeds up a little too much
    Butterflies make my stomach turn
    And out of my head fly all the practical lessons I learn

    With every gaze, glance we share
    a little more of my walls crumble and tear
    All the ice, the cold I had used to cover my heart
    has thawed, and my innner soul shed the dark

    Have you ever wondered why it is
    Why its so hard to stop whenever we kiss
    Why we want to touch, to see
    Why I want it to only be you and me

    I know that from your mouth come no lies
    and you are far more then just a man in my eyes
    You caught my heart so many days ago
    And now I longer want it back or to go

    I can only hope our love is true
    and that it won't hurt either of us, me or you
    And so I will work each day
    to let this love just take us away




    Submitted on 2006-01-17 16:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this and I agree with Kimberley this is a classic and I can relate.. but every relatioship goes through difficult times but when you pull out and the sun shines again oh its the greatest .. good luck in LOVE..

    I can't pin point one part that I loved because I loved it all

    peace & smiles
    Penny
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was kind of classic. The rhymes didnt seem too forced. And it went smoothly to me like a song.. But thats my opinion..

    Nice peice
    Keep writing
    Kimberley
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      Some of the lines are a bit choppy in meter, but that happens a lot when we start trying to describe those feelings that are undescribable yet so well known.
    All I can say is to guard closely your heart, for hearts are fragile, and love is sometimes tainted by the most unexpected sources, but I'll cross my findgers that he's "The One"
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]



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