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    dots Submission Name: Nameless (revised)dots
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    Author: Psychohenry32
    ASL Info:    1638/Femail/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 22/33/24
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 244
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    dotsNameless (revised)dots
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    I stand there alone,
    But completely surrounded.
    The ever shocking silence
    Leaves me cold hearted.
    I find no one out here with me,
    They all have their places to go.
    Left behind
    Forgotten
    I still stand strong
    Maybe someone will take notice
    All I want is to be not alone.
    Will someone find me?
    Will someone remember me?
    All the faces,
    So many faces.
    They gaze at me
    As though I were in a glass dome
    And long since dead.




    Submitted on 2006-01-17 16:45:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, I just came from reading your other piece and i nust say this is 100% better, you have a poetic flow to the words you chose to represent your feelings and you've created a piece that really shows the reader the sadness you're feeling.
    A much more powerful write than your last and with much better substance, you put your feelings across well offering an almost visual effect to the reader.
    Great write

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    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by TroubledSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. It sets off a feeling of isolation. The last two lines are really good. Feelings come across well. I can't really find anything wrong with it. NIce.
    x
    caroline
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by mysweetsuicide | [ Reply to This ]



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