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    dots Submission Name: Round 1dots

    Author: MyFairCalamity
    ASL Info:    17**I'm a lady**philly
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 115/67/16
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
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    dotsRound 1dots

    Block out the sound
    Denial makes it fake
    Hope the cursing won't be so abound
    Beg it's a dream
    And from this sleep you'll soon wake

    Only fools rush in
    Only cowards back out
    Stop listening to fights neither will win
    Cover your ears
    Maybe you won't hear them shout

    You'll retreat to your hole
    And turn the music up loud
    On to your favorite pillow you'll hold
    Squeeze it tight
    Wrap the big blanket 'round like a shroud

    The sheets'll absorb your tears
    The quilts'll muffle the screams
    The bed will be the only one that hears
    Stop the sobs
    Your crying may be louder than it seems

    Soon the curses will end
    This bout will be through
    But these wounds won't soon mend
    Don't listen to them
    Soon they'll start again, then welcome to round 2

    Submitted on 2006-01-17 19:27:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really deep write
    In this write you speak of the sad reality that sleep can sometimes not be an escape from reality for if you are in a depressed mood nightmares will soon follow
    This is so true
    A Very clever write
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting way to talk about a widespread problem, I really like the rhyme scheme you came up with. The italics line breaks it up nicely and gives it more of a prosey feel.

    Your words are pretty well chosen, it's a very hard-hitting description of parents fighting, yet it doesn'r give the plot away too early.

    Very well done, I liked this immensely

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      HI KAate ,
    Wow i type like a crackhead. Anywho, That was lovely. I always want to retreat to my whole and turn the music up loud and i like things i can relate to. I would probably turn up the used becuase i love them. See how i get off track. Well im going to talk to u now because ur rite next to me.

    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this comments pretty much pointless since I already voiced my opinon earlier... but I wanna comment anyways You know I can always find something else to say.

    I like the structure. It's different.
    Ooo Creative
    It's sad though.

    The italicized parts make it even better. It kind of made me think of someone telling themself what to do because no one else is there to. I dont care if I'm way off with that... its just what I got from it.

    I already told you what my favorite part (in general) is, but my favorite lines are:

    "Don't listen to them"
    (cause I think it says a lot)


    "The bed will be the only one that hears"
    (cause that is just too cool ).

    You are sooooooooo awesome!


    (i like to add extra letters to lots of things lol)
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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