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    dots Submission Name: Modern Warfaredots
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    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Bytes: 500



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       draw your own conclusions. you know me better than that, why would i tell you what im thinking?


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    dotsModern Warfaredots
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    Another war waged today,
    A brand new battle breathed away.
    Vile weapons filled with pain,
    Perfected maneuvers laced with hate.
    Fear instilled in the innocent heart,
    We couldn't stand to be apart.

    The tanks roll in and the planes fly high.
    With each passing glance I see you die.
    Normandy storms and Guam bombs,
    A quiet young heart suddenly stopped.
    Icy glares and casual stares,
    Mingle casually in the commons.




    Submitted on 2006-01-17 20:50:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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