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    dots Submission Name: Get a Gripdots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 365
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Happy
    Total Views: 856
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2205



    Description:
       i honestly got so inspired after seeing an old trailer recently for that usher movie called "In the Mix". it was sad, and i thought

    and thought

    and thought

    and then i wrote this. kinda funny, depends on how you look at it.


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    dotsGet a Gripdots
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    its just one of those wake up late on a work days
    one where you ain't goin in no matter how much the gig pays
    where the grind seems at times to be a cell on death row
    you don't see anything but color lights
    and hear nothing but techno
    but let's go, clear walls for work space
    figure who's getting picked off when you get ticked off at the work place
    who's getting the pink slip, caught in the steady stream of pay roll
    and no vacation, what happened to my pension you assholes
    call in, make up an excuse to have some no work fun
    no work, no funds, you gotta suffer for that income
    but when alls said and done, your degrees don't mean shit
    so move to a new state, get a new handle or get a grip

    cuz you're not alone in the mix,
    there will always be slackers getting dicked
    always be actors settling for shitty flats
    working part time at burger shack to get their acts together
    auditions every weekend, hoping something will give
    hoping something miraculous can give them a grip

    give em a sip a henny and a bowl a' nuts down by o'henry's
    you not working for nothing if you drive everyday to denny's
    slip em a twenty, tip em and compliment the service
    or don't say a word, cuz i'm only trying to grip this deniro for a purchase
    a new set of speakers and turntables,
    i'm not beyond not inviting mom down so she can just assume i'm stable
    i'm an everyday working class, kiss my black ass
    coming up in life, the word's the only thing i'm getting last
    i grab that grip primarily, for sanity's sake
    scared in this landscape, aware that i have no brakes

    i'm not alone in the mix
    there will always be a pastor stacking chips
    while i hustle all week just to contribute to his poker game
    instead of fame, i chose to stack plastic toys on racks
    and boy do i love getting a grip on this cash
    cuz in the mix, you grip it quick before the actors get it faster




    Submitted on 2006-01-17 22:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Damn dude...damn. This shyt is off tha hook man. Not only was the beginning catchy from the very start...but the delivery was just perfect. You totally nailed this. Totally seemed original and never really explored before. Hats off to you with a couple kudos. I think I'm gunna stalk you and add this to my favorites...this shyt was pretty damn fly main! Keep the beats bumpin' and the wordz flowin. PeaCe
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by MC-Chillz | [ Reply to This ]
      You like telling peeps to kiss your black azz don't you? Well

    ( | )...kiss my white one! LMFAO! It does have a nice plump roundness to it...it may not be too hard for ya! LMFAO!

    This was some good ish. You pulled of your lyrical thang here.

    You stated a lot of good ish that some overlook. you have the mentality...you have the flows...what else you got?

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      dawg this seemed like a "gotta hustle that paper" rap. so [censored] tight. u get mad kudos for this [censored]. another fave from u. really i don't know how u write [censored] like this.

    but when alls said and done, your degrees don't mean [censored]
    so move to a new state, get a new handle or get a grip

    give em a sip a henny and a bowl a' nuts down by o'henry's
    you not working for nothing if you drive everyday to denny's
    slip em a twenty, tip em and compliment the service
    or don't say a word, cuz i'm only trying to grip this deniro for a purchase

    i think this is one of the best raps i've ever read from u. although everything i've seen u write is pretty damn original
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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