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    dots Submission Name: Death is Hers *revised*dots

    Author: Indigo Kid
    ASL Info:    33/f/everywhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 428/438/115
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is about a woman who is manipulating a man with her sexual prowess. He wants her badly, and she knows exactly what she is doing...

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    dotsDeath is Hers *revised*dots

    The wind blew, like a child playing with
    a wind instrument.

    Cold and beautiful was that day, crunchy
    and crystalized.

    She felt the earth shake while they were on the beach
    and watched

    As the earth from the other side of the bay
    crumbled like a cookie into the milk of the ocean, turbulant with emotion

    Her eyes gleamed at him as she touched his
    wet moistness with her intentional lips

    And as she saw the Tsunami wave rushing towards them, she smiledů

    Submitted on 2006-01-17 22:57:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great images in this.

    that day, crunchy
    and crystalized.

    I love the opening line. It gives me a sense of disharmony and yet playfulness. There is uneasiness from those kinds of untrained sounds.

    Nice job.

    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I know that situation all to well, HA! Why oh why do us as guys fall into those moments where its life on the beach and never see the tsunami coming? Oar well, we are dumb mammals sometimes, HA!

    This had some great imagery to it kid. Nice stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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