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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Angeldots
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    Author: Eah
    ASL Info:    20/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 74/81/22
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 232
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    dotsBeautiful Angeldots
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    She weeps for herself, and for her demons,
    And for the world in which she is forced to live.
    She weeps silently in her so called sleep
    Because she doesn’t want them to see her pain
    It’s written in everything she does
    They will never see it though
    Because they are simply blind.
    She walks among them like angles do
    Gracefully, silently, humbly
    And they do not notice her because of this.
    But had she disappeared from this world
    They would have taken notice.
    They would have said "oh how tragic,
    Oh how sad, she was such a sweet girl."
    But would they have been thinking "how could she,
    So selfish."
    They will never know who she really is.
    She hides inside herself to save them from her reality
    Her pain and anguish.
    Only those willing to look, willing to listen and seek will know.
    She is beautiful in everything she does.
    She weeps for herself, and for her demons,
    And for the world in which she is forced to live.
    And she is coloring her soul with beauty every time.
    Her tears, though heartbreaking, are beautiful
    Her foul language and bad habits are beautiful
    Her life through love and hate is beautiful.




    Submitted on 2006-01-18 10:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this poem. seriously, i dont think i would change anything about it. the thing i like most about your poems is that i can relate to a lot of it. this one is my favorite so far.
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by icaughtfire591 | [ Reply to This ]
      ,It's so true, howpeople ca be arond thier friendsand even thier kids,yet no nothing abou them,because they haven't taken the time to know them,truly.

    which is why I wrte this quote"the greatest gift one person can give to another is thw willingness to learn everything about them, so in thier hour of need, you will know they need help and desire to want too"

    Your poem screams out emotions and the strong will you have and in between these lines it also shows how much of a giver you must be.

    I would suggest to try and keep the word she out as much as possible in this poem,because after the first time we know who is the one speaking,by doing this it will give the emotions more power.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...not bad, plenty of emotion and all of it good, but at the same time, there isn't somethign that grabs me and brings me into THIS poem instead of all the others i have read similar to it. YOu have a great start, but i think with a little more emphasis and use of language it could be even better.
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]



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