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    dots Submission Name: A simple dreamdots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       A man of action, he was NOT.


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    dotsA simple dreamdots
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    Last night I had a dream
    a dream of a man who spoke
    the most beautiful words
    and behind his words
    were his intentions
    and he followed through
    with his actions
    As I woke next morning
    with the cold beside me
    I had nothing but his words
    to hold onto




    Submitted on 2006-01-18 10:39:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't like the ending.
    | Posted on 2013-04-17 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      i love your poem. i think it has a lots of feelings in it and i added it to my faves list. u did a good job. keep expressing ur feeling...
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by dominican | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice.

    Dream lovers can seem so real and perhaps cause us to question our waking world.

    Last night I had a dream
    a dream of a man who spoke

    Just a thought, but you might look at finding an alternative word for one of the uses of dream. I think it might refine the image in the reader's mind.

    Very nicely done.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]


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