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    dots Submission Name: Miserable Paperdots
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    Author: Tissue
    ASL Info:    17/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 80/87/33
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 960
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    Bytes: 486



    Description:
       Written for a piece of scrap paper that served no other purpose but to house one of my poems.


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    dotsMiserable Paperdots
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    a small, poor paper-piece
    torn: jaggedy, raggedy.
    what would you have been?
    scrap, that's what. more?
    no. just a lonely, wifeless
    paper-piece.

    your edges are harsh.
    your tint is wrong-color.
    your lines end at the edge.
    what good are you?

    were you not the keeper of
    this
    delightful piece,

    i might throw you away with
    other's that
    host failure.




    Submitted on 2006-01-18 11:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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