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Author:	Clayton
ASL Info:	55/Country Boy/Somewhere
Elite Ratio:	5.02 - 880/809/193
Words:	174

Class/Type:	Poetry/
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I'm sorry, about personal attacks on this scum bag of a poor excuse for a man. A judge he might be, but a greater judge will make him pay!

Tears

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She used to play with Barbie dolls,
And talk to her teady bears.
A smile for those who made her laugh,
But, now all I see are tears.
She knew him well, and every day,
Her mom let him through the door.
When all alone he took her hand,
And forced her down to the floor.

Those years stole her childhood,
As the events were brought to light.
Arrested and brought to justice,
And a Judge gives up the fight!

A coward and a fool behind a robe,
What man might give such thought!
Four long years, they crushed a life,
And pay with the sixty days, he got?

I writh my fist in utter disgust,
That scum might sit so high.
Might they both, soon rot in hell,
And soon come, the day they die!

Hear the cry of her blackened soul,
A child whose life is still not free.
If I had my way, I'd judge those too,
I'd feed the sharks, that roam the sea!

Submitted on 2006-01-18 11:28:19 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Clayton, I grieve with you in your loss. We are all members of one race,the human race. Your Dad, said the same thing as my son said to my wife,"Let him write. When he dies,I'll hae them published. I know I'll reap his fortunes, because he's a good writer. But it wasn't for the future,at least while he was in the flesh.
Gosh, I know what you ane all your dad's family members are going through. Allow me a short eulogy to your dad:
A poet and writer has gone to Heaven
with a pen to write in the Book of Life;
all his days on earth
he wrote of humans causing others fright.
He thirsted for justice
and now he gives that thirst
to the son he left behind.

In"Tears" at present I reserve my judging of the judge. A judge has to follow the law of the land as written. I place judgement upon those law makers who knowingly leave loop holes in
their legislation . Many,many judges are grieved to tears when a judge knows a felon should get more than the law says.
Yes, my son was robbed and shot to death.
The felons who did it were only given twenty years. WHY/ WHY///????
Because the one taknig my son's life plea bargained. Yes, it saved the state a lot of money by not having to go through with a trial. I ask WHY? wHY? wHEN DOES SAVING OF MONEY BECOME MORE THAN JUSTICE FOR THE VICTIMS?!!!!!!!
| Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  I'll definatly say I'm impressed that for the topic (which aside from having first hand experience with. and having friend's who have had I just agree with your view on naturally anyway) you managed to actually write it well to, a lot of people usually write rants about the same thing and it is just not as good to read, for some reason a rant just doesn't leave the same impact. it seems there's always (in real life too) a negative character in the matter, a judge in this case, and I completely agree 60 days is a pathetic excuse for restitution. I've talked a lot about the same thing and I still dont' understand what could be going through someones mind to make them enjoy or think that it is ok to do such a thing to anyone, but especially someone so innocent who couldn't possibly have done anything wrong to the person anyway. very good write, I wouldn't change a thing:)
peace and love,
~jess
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  I know this was submitted back in january.
but, I happened to just be fooling around and browsing and I came across it.
excellent. I really love the fact that even when I set aside the "topic" which I agree passionately with, it is also very well written.
I applaud you.
(I might have spelt applaud wrong, and for that I am sorry.)
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by die_another_day | [ Reply to This ]
  you did a wonderful job with this piece, Clayton. It is horrible when people get away with doing such disgusting things. It happens so often, also. There are so many victims out there, and it is for reasons pointed out in this piece that they stay quiet. It is one of my biggest fears, cus i have a little girl, and i think you did an amazing job.
| Posted on 2006-02-24 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]
  OMG... This was an amazing write. It brought back a lot of memories, for me. The way I read it, did this man that got off beat her or molest her...? Well, either way. It sums up great. A lot of people have problems writing on this kind of subject matter. You pulled it off very well.

CAH
| Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  To say there is a lot of strong sentiment in this poem is an understatement. It is very emotive and compelling. You paint a good picture of the events and the consequences. I particularly like the scope of your theme, addressing not only the victim and victimizer but also the system that makes it permissive. I wonder if focusing the blame on one judge works with the theme or against it. In one sense it puts the blame on individuals. It is a very American way of seeing things. On the other hand it glosses over the real problem, namely that by law, in most states mandatory prison terms are stronger for drug offenders than they are for child molesters. See, there was a war on drugs but never a war on child abuse. It may be discussed in the public forum and media but there has never been a national movement against child abuse. For that reason alone judges have more leeway in child abuse cases than in drug cases such that often prison terms are longer for a petty drug dealer than a child molester. Well. It’s just a thematic observation about the scope and focus of the poem. I like your choice of rhyme scheme. It gives the poem Lyricism without making it Dr. Seuss like or even trite. So ya, nice write.
| Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by Car va g o | [ Reply to This ]
  Judges don't listen as they can only judge guilty without doubt. Sixty days is ridiculous and happens far too often for comfort. The poem is very heart wrenching, there are a mixture of emotions that come to mind including anger, hatred and utter disbelief for the stupidity of the English justice system. A brilliant piece of writing making the point forcefully.

Favourite.
| Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by selfbetrayal | [ Reply to This ]
  clayton

you have no reason to apologize for this piece. i wouldve said the same thing. to do that a child, i think death should be the consequences...a painful one. no child should have to hurt like that, and if a judge cant see that than he truly blind. children are the innocence that we adults have managed to let go. without them and their acts of naivety and purity we would be in a world of hell...sorry babbling too much. i agree whole heartedly with what youre saying.

jo
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Little_Woman | [ Reply to This ]
  I completely understand how you feel i think, hatred for this kind of behaviour and an almost helplessness to prevent it happening again to someone else.

We all live in hope that others wrongs are punished, and our own forgiven.
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  Very powerful poem... very moving. Just remember for all wrongs not righted there is karma to take care of it... evil is repaid 10 fold by karma...
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Lauralye | [ Reply to This ]
  I applaud you for writing this! I'm actually in shock by the whole 60 day thing. If it was his daughter I have to wonder what the hell he would've done! Unfortunately, I don't think there's much justice for people that this has happened to-but this is absolutely NUTS! You have to wonder where this judge's agenda lies and what's lying in his back pocket, ya know?!

Either way, this was a good write on a horrible topic. My heart cries for that girl and I'm beyond digusted for the 2 men that succeeded in violating her. In the end, she will get her justice.

Candi
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very well written poem. Very heartbreaking and such a horrid and disgusting tale of tragedy it is. Your anger towards this person is very well deserved and I can say I feel the same way. I never understood how some people can possibly be so sick and cruel. And this says so much about our justice system as well! I have always said an eye for an eye, yet our justice system never seems to punish people firmly enough that really deserve it. It is unbelievable and in my opinion, the judge is just as guilty for the decision he made here. Nicely written and expressed sweetie. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  This brings to mind Mark Anthony's funeral oration,"If you have tears prepare to shed them now." How awful that a mother would assist a male friend to destroy her daughter's life. I have not spit enough to cover that @%*+@#. (expletive reserved for face to face confrontation)
Let's not get too uptight about the judge giving such a mild sentence. Most judges would do as you recommend. But those stooges making laws fear retribution ,they, therefore; attach the least maximum penalty to the law they make. Judges have to stay within those bounds.
We ought to grow tired of seeing the same old legislators who stay in place for 15 or 20 years. Don't tell me there are no others to take their place out of a national population of over 200,000,000. Yes,"I writhe my fists in utter disgust that suc ch scum should sit on high." Lovely placement of words and rhyme.
I think the poem would make a hit song since so many of us know of such happenings.
Man! You got the power of words"
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  These are never pleasant situations to address - nothing makes me feel more ill in my soul than those that harm others - especially children.
You did a great job here of getting the emotion across and also the irony - the scales of justice seldom seem to be balanced in our society.
Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
tif
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh the wheels of (Justice?) I beleive just as you do Clayton and in y opinion there is plenty of food out there in this world today. Fortunately it is not up to me to be the judge!
I think this is a well written piece of poetry and I can find no fault with it. I look forward to read'n more of your writes in the future.
!doc'
| Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very heart-wrenching to read Clayton, as it should be. It evokes a feeling of sadness and sympathy for the child, and one of disgust and anger for the perpetrator as well as a numb outrage for the judge in this case. A sobering sombre poem that sadly, will remind everyone who reads it, of similar experiences,-just different names and different places.
Well Done
Silver
| Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow... I'll help ya with the feeding of the sharks .. too many times you see that happen and you wonder what the heck is that Judges problem Holy crap 60 days!... Your poem was great I wouldn't change anything on it..great feeling in it also makes me wanna go find a judge just to see if they are blind or something .. thank you for sharing..
| Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
  A judge he may be but a greater judge will make him pay! Powerful words. I have not even read the poem yet and already you have captured my attention and my empathy because I can sense a lot of anger.

She used to play with Barbie dolls,
And talk to her teady bears.
A smile for those who made her laugh,
But, now all I see are tears.
She knew him well, and every day,
Her mom let him through the door.
When all alone he took her hand,
And forced her down to the floor.

Oh my God! The innocence is gone, the trust betrayed. And from reading this the tears have already began. Such poweful emotion is displayed here. I can not help but feel sorry for the girl and am already hating thescoundrel who humiliated her. After all it takes a scoundrel to rob a woman of something that is precious to her. A scoundrel robs a person of the life and hope that burns ever bright on a young woman.

Those years stole her childhood,
As the events were brought to light.
Arrested and brought to justice,
And a Judge gives up the fight!

Amazing! After all of her troubles, the injustice of the world that she should not be given the justice that she deserved. It makes no sense that the world should act that way, with no sense of justice, yet it does. I wish judges would treat each trouble as if it was their own. Look at what happened with Judge Letkow and her tragedy. I was also watching a show called NUMB3RS and their show had to do with the assasination of a judge's wife by a woman who had been wronged by him. There is no more justice in the world. IT seems that every day the world moves towards the dark side and instead of a ying yang effect we see evil everywhere.

A coward and a fool behind a robe,
What man might give such thought!
Four long years, they crushed a life,
And pay with the sixty days, he got?

An eternity of pain punished by only sixty days. Oh, what a harsh punishment! (note the sarcasm). I am so angry at this point that I can really imagine the hatred you must feel towards this man that indirectly humiliated the child by not awarding a proper punishment for her tragedy. She is Lavinia, from Shakespeare's tragedy Titus Andronicus, who was raped and her tongue and arms were taken away from her. So for the victim her liberty has been taken away and she will forever be bound to the memories of that tragedy.

I writh my fist in utter disgust,
That scum might sit so high.
Might they both, soon rot in hell,
And soon come, the day they die!

What more is there to say here that you yourself have not explained.

Hear the cry of her blackened soul,
A child whose life is still not free.
If I had my way, I'd judge those too,
I'd feed the sharks, that roam the sea!

You do have such power with words. I can hear the thunder rumbling, the earth shaking and the wind howling as you are saying these words. There is a burden in your heart which you will never be rid of. All you can do is hope that you may be able to live with it. I am so sorry for the tragedy that the child was put to and sorry that the mother was deceived in this atrocity. It is truly atrocious that a man would take away the innocence of a child and that a keeper of the peace would bring even more torture to this child.
| Posted on 2006-04-18 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]

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