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    dots Submission Name: What the Helldots

    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       On one level it is about poetry, but the poetry is a metaphor for life.

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    dotsWhat the Helldots

    Poetry is my life.

    I am told that some people
    don't get goose bumps
    or giddy from
    pondering poetry.
    I have to say
    that is a shame.

    I've heard that some
    of them can even
    be mean if for
    a simple reason
    a piece of paper
    filled with patterns of
    alluring alliteration
    seems to be
    metaphors unmatched
    to meanings.

    Oh well, whose to tell
    there may be a few,
    perhaps a person
    like you,
    that enjoys playing
    with vocabulary blocks,
    wordy toys and
    building tipsy towers
    from thoughts.

    I'll keep on writing,
    what the hell.

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      Very good poem you have here! I found it dark and funny. Is that okay? I am especially amused by the last part, yeah wth, we should write for ourselves and not for anyone else. I strongly believe in that. And what a poem you've made just to capture the vehemence of that sentiment! Excellent. Thanks for the read, I enjoyed it, really! Looking forward to more great pieces.
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by shatila | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a curously interesting piece you have. I was caught by the title, and I'm glad I checked it out. I can understand where you are coming from. Some people are just too neandrathalic to apreciate the beauty of a good poem. I'm glad your title caught my eye, this was definately worth reading. good job with this.
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem. I was drawn in here from the title as it made me very curious to see what this was about. Now that I have read it, I am happy I stopped in. This is very well written and expressed and you have touched on the love of poetry and life as a metaphor very well here. I enjoy reading poems and trying to crawl inside someone else's mind to figure out their perspective. I find it fascinating. Some people just dont get it I guess and it is indeed a shame, as I feel they are really missing out on a beautiful thing. Very good poem! Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool write, Chrystine. Metaphor bids we notice in the first place that life is valuable, enough to write about a simple pleasure, in fact. But this becomes a conundrum in effect, to notice makes us write and in turn notice more beauty.

    OK, sounds like we've got the upward spiral going now, didn't think it about that did you? Nice work, thanks for sharing.


    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very nice and not at all what I expected. more people should appreciate poetry and life for that matter. there are alot of poets out there though. it's daunting to think of just how many there might be. but that doesn't keep me from writing my own version of poetry! nice work here Chrystine.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      The title drew me in because that's how I feel at the moment- what the hell. LOL
    But I see what you're saying here.. about Poetry and Life.. and how some do not fully appreciate either.
    Life, as in poetry, is filled with "overlooked beauty".

    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Right...WTH...that's what I say. I know that I write things at times that some people look at and don't appreciate. But...I wrote it...so as long as it means something to me...that's all that matters.

    Keep doing what you do...I too love word games and going through vocabulary. that's part of appreciating the art of poetry!

    Much love,

    li Li
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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