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    dots Submission Name: Blinddots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/111
    Words: 472
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 276
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    dotsBlinddots
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    now I'm blind
    my eyes can't see the light.
    but in my heart,
    there is a candle burning Bright,
    I'm blind...
    but I still have this ray of light...
    who made for me the day and night ,

    in my life...
    there's nothing white..nothing bright
    since the day you went and took my sight
    took the forms, the shapes,the lines
    and you left just a deep deep
    darkly blackness and nothing alight
    from this day....
    I became blind

    I

    but my spirit Little Candle
    had saved some light for dream
    dream about your coming back to me
    and you are here by my side
    and Im no longer blind
    I dream and then my eyes gleam
    and between the clouds
    the light streams

    it's you, yeah .. it's you ..
    I run and hold you tight,
    and I tremble when I feel your heart,
    so close to mine...

    II

    but my flame grows higher,
    burning my dream in it's fire
    and I saw the tears of the candle
    and I wondered ! why the hell she crys ?
    I gazed to the gray clouds, in the red sky,
    and I heard the birds screaming in the air,
    running arounda black angel standing there

    III

    I heard my end whispering in my ear,
    but myheart didn't hear.
    I just can't surrender,
    I still have your candle
    I'm still waiting , not scared
    even when I'm alone there ,
    in vacancy of the nowhere
    when every thing
    and everyone,
    are just shadows in the ground
    when the whipping silence,
    is the only sound
    and the emptiness inside ..
    becomes all around

    IV

    but don't worry,
    if my sun doesn't shine tomorrow,
    you will feel my warm wind when it's cold
    you will feel my angel down to hold
    you when you sleep alone
    when you are sad
    just think of me,and I will be there ..
    to sing you my song
    I'm around you every where,
    and where you find love ..
    you will find me there

    IX

    if I know that I 'm not going
    to wake up tomorrow,
    I will lay down in peace,
    with a smile on my face
    thank God that I had get the chance
    and it slowly comes to me every second
    every word every glance

    so my eyes will not going wet
    even when the black Turns red

    O ,ah.. I see darkness slips away
    and it's the beam of a new day

    now ...
    when I watch the last ray
    of my dying flame
    I will be smiling,
    sing a love song
    and call your name

    Muhammed mamdouh 3/2003






    Submitted on 2006-01-18 13:50:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love the whole "blind" analogy and it waz awsome. sorry not much to say other than breath taking.
    peace
    Fana
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      i think it was pretty cool how you split everything up. it got confusing but i like the symbols used. this poem is very different.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by shotxgunxsinner | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how you used light and dark in this poem. Putting the two together makes the image your poem creates eh...cool. The rhyming sounded a little forced.
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by Seele | [ Reply to This ]



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