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    dots Submission Name: Idol Handsdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       No idolatry intended...

    All the white powder
    all the white dust,
    in each conversation
    never discussed.

    All the white powder
    all the white snow,
    if they weren't discussed
    then where did they go?

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIdol Handsdots

    It is immaculate-
    a pale, slate lane bathed
    in fine white emptiness,
    divine non-entities
    dancing on slender pins,
    anarchy and deviltry in
    absentia with
    folded hands,
    adoring entropy.

    The inept caress
    of a mother tongue
    left speechless,
    and numb
    with whispers
    of an animist
    as a bright
    sphere of illusion.

    Submitted on 2006-01-19 01:16:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm... an interesting write. I believe I have gathered what you wanted this to be about and then again I could be wrong. It was an interesting write nonetheless and I really enjoyed your choice of words.

    Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for sharing.

    I really like that thing you had in the description.
    Neat rhyme.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I get it, but I've never done it.
    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by Visi | [ Reply to This ]
      Bill, I have read all the previous comments on this poem as indeed you probably have yourself. I might have said something similar before as it is my unfortunate wont so to do when I read such poetry. People by and large don't undrstand it. They are impressed by it. THey feel that perrhaps, if they were more intelligent, they would understand it. I'm a little more pragmatic, because In my case I don't need to look up any of your words in a dictionary. Only once in a blue moon at my age do I come across an English word I am not familiar with, but I also don't understand your poem. Could it be too that I am not intelligent enough? Yet a lifetime of experience has taught me that I very rarely come across anybody I consider more intelligent than I, and then only in certain areas. Essentially you can't compare intelligences. Each one is a different shape. So, Bill, you are intentionally or unintentionally failing to communicate. I suspect this is because you are so familiar with your poem, that you have assigned a personal meaning to your words. The poem is based on an idiosymbology that we can't interpret, come what may.
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      Do you ever find it frustrating that many people cannot grasp the meaning behind your poems, or simply do not exert enough effort to do so?

    I have to confess that as per usual I had to look up a few words, "animist" for one, again, my fault, not yours.

    Your poems are a little bit like many of the songs that have become classics over the last 30 years...at first often they are not to the general publics taste...they lack the "hooks" and instant understanding you get with today's manufactured pop for instance, yet for those who spend the time trying to come to terms with the song, they are the ones who are rewarded with the classics that stand the test of time...

    Maybe one day people will be jumping on the rws bandwagon, saying "I use to have him added to my list of favourites, back when he was just posting on a poetry website..."
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      It may be a lack of being used to looking at other peole's work, or I duno. This didn't make any sense to me past the biggining. I think in trying to understand what you were writing here I was thrown off by your broken imagery. I think if you elaborated, in otherwords lowered the broken iges count in this poem, it wold be better.
    I do understand that not all work is meant to be understood, but it is a good goal to work with when writing something.
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      I think strength of this work lies in the irony of insistence on creating such graven images who cannot see, hear, or walk, but are worshiped devoutly. And yet the original Creator formed us with such ingenius endowments, and it would seem no attention is paid. Intriguing and thought provoking perspective. Before reading this, I had never put that together in my head quite so simply. Excellent piece.

    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by giventofly | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is really deep
    This is one of the few poems I cant quite figure out what the main theme was
    I will just tell you my interpitation
    I believe you were thinking of the Light and referring to the hidden beauty the Light has
    I too write a lot of my poetry based upon the Light
    I really enjoyed reading this
    My Friend I thank you from the bottom of my Heart for your kind words
    I will be looking for more of your writes
    Please keep in touch
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is certainly a complex kinda poem. I must admit, I have read this one three times and I have no idea what this one is about. hee hee! I will tell you however, that this is really well written and your word choices are very good. A couple of words here I even had to look up to find out what the hell they meant! I find that to be very impressive, and usually I dont find myself going to the dictionary after reading a poem. I thank you as you have taught me a thing or two with this write. Sorry I came up short in regards to the meaning here but the wording alone gets my respect. Very nice job. Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Pygmalion and philology! super nice. i like the condensed feel to this. nothing exaggerated, nothing extreme. i love the subtlety of it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      No, the view I see is that there is no good or bad, let's say we've taken the Zen road, it just is. More explicitly it is quite inviting and comfortable, and there are no worries we must have as we live.

    Divine Mother as most cultures in the world describe the feminine goddess, which rules the earth. This could be taken as written from the Tao and realize that is just my first impression. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed this write.

    I do ask though because often I have no idea of what you are approaching, I find in a delightful abstraction that I seldom hit your main line of thought. And yet, your purpose depends on how much your ego needs for us to see.


    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, as with all your writing, this was a challenge. I'm getting the safeness of a white picket fence and all that that symbolizes being seen as a cage that must provoke the opposite sorts of behaviour and environment than intended. The mother wants it to be a haven and the kids see it as a trap...the imagery of anarchy and deviltry standing by to watch the show is clever.

    I liked the sonics of tongue/numb and the way the bright sphere of illusion harks back to the picket fence.

    The poem was too complex for me get much of an emotional attachment to but you had me reaching for the dictionary so perhaps with a few more reads that will come.

    Great poetry needs great audiences and in this case I'm sure I fell short of the mark.

    Challenging stuff.

    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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