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    dots Submission Name: Insanitydots
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    Author: Atrip187
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Some Alley
    Elite Ratio:    4.53 - 81/76/21
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 160
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 740



    Description:
       Just Read It!!!! Then comment, What did you think, what meanings do you see? Seriously I wrote it a long time ago and really have just a guess as to what i was feeling maybe it will be clear to someone else.


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    dotsInsanitydots
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    Skull drag me through thorns,
    Scrub me with steel wool,
    And deliver my decayed body to her.
    Then she can smile with sincerity,
    As i now see with clarity,
    End this insanty,
    Peel my nails from my toes,
    Drain the fluid from my eyes,
    and deliver them to her,
    Then she can smile with sicerity,
    As i now see with clarity,
    End this insanty,
    Snap each of my Ribs,
    Slash each of my limbs,
    and deliver my screams to her,
    Then she can smile with sincerity,
    As I now see with clarity,
    End this insanity.
    Tell her i am sorry,
    Then she can smile with sincerity,
    As i now see with clarity,
    End this insanity.




    Submitted on 2006-01-19 01:18:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ya know, the poem was pretty good...not great, but good...BUT i am lmao that you comment on your own stuff...at least you can admit you love yourself lol. I just love smart@ss quality and in you saying I heard you were really really cute i'm in love...I LOVE IT...btw, are you really really cute?
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read this poem I can see a girl that has hurt you and your way of "paying back" is by having her see your death. Tortured and gone with only an I'm sorry. of course I could be wrong about this but It reminded me of a time when I wanted to do that just to show them how much they hurt me.
    Very good poem the only thing I noticed was a typing error on the second sincerity, missing the "n" other then that well done and hope to read more of your work. thank you
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is great stuff, how'd you get so good? And i heard you were really really cute too, I'm in love!


    Check me out
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]



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