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Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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lalalalala i have no idea but you can tell me if you liked it. All i can say is this poem started to be about a shower...then as my thoughts moved to my boyfriend...so did this poem....then i guess its about me and him making love in a shower, get it? Anyways tell me what you thought


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Warm and relief
felt from the water
that once ran down my skin
washing away the soap
that lavered my body
embrace the waters warmth
dream of him and become satisfied
not by the dreams of him
but for the need of him
the need for him inside of me
whispereing in my ear
how much he wants me
his hands roaming my body
learning every inch of me
leaving hot kisses on my neck
going to my mouth
taking away the pain of the world
while the water hits us softly
a situation beyond me
i'm reaching that place
between life and death
me and him....




Submitted on 2006-01-19 04:37:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah i liked this one a lot. this time u made me blush. i love how some writes just come randomly. i do the same thing...kinda. a lot of my writes start off as freestyles that i do in the shower.
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Even though it doesn't have a rythmic flow it is still very good! I love the descriptive words, and how I felt like I was there (no I'm not perverted) But the way you described everything... I can't find the words. Keep it up though, I am really wanting to read more of work if it is all like this!
Alyssa
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  This is hot, I especail like the lines "not by the dreams of him,but for the need of him!" It would make it even better to have some sort of rhyme sceme or rythmic flow.
| Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]


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