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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       venting- yes- just venting...


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    dotsAlonedots
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    Say it was real...say it was real.....
    but your actions never did
    match the way you said you feel.
    I wont take all the blame,
    I'm not feeling any more pain.
    What I have learned from all this
    is that theres more to love
    than a passionate kiss.
    While the kiss itself
    is all well and good,
    it wont fill your soul
    the way you think it should.
    When the body is there-
    but nobody's home,
    its best that you continue
    your journey alone.




    Submitted on 2006-01-19 08:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Are you SURE it was never real?
    | Posted on 2013-04-17 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont normally like it when there is just one huge stanza like this. However, this time it worked, cause the rythm and the rhyme carried the words well.

    I would have had some big letters just to .. I dont know.. It just feels more worked through..
    But really, great write! Nice poem with an important message.

    Its better to love ourself in lonelyness, than love an illusion of love thats not there!
    | Posted on 2006-02-10 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with your poem! This had so much honesty and emotion in it that I read it like four times, lol. The topic and the complete substance behind it is near perfection. It made me think about things that have happened in my own life and it made me compare them to this poem. You pretty much summed up the way I feel about those times in my life. Even though they aren't the exact same subject as the kind that you're talking about, I could still make the connections and compare it. Great job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Alura completly! I love the topic, and I could feel all of your pain. This is really a great write, and I can't wait to see what else you have got in store for me to read!
    alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your topic and whats behind what your saying and can totally relate, but there are a few rough stops and make sure u keep the same tence throught a line even at the sacrifice of the rhyme.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]


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