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    dots Submission Name: CRYdots
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    Author: Akai_Ame
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 223/181/46
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This came from me thinking while trying to write out a paper. I got thinking about when my current boyfriend (today is our two month anny) lied to me about his ex. He told me he couldn't hang out because he was going to see his friend JT. Well i made plans with a friend who happens to live by him. I forgot how to get to Tony's house so we met at Charles's. Ya...JT turned out to be Nikki, his ex. Told me that he only lied to me so i wouldn't freak out...Then she ended up spending the night. i came back the next day which was Christmas eve...he was using her boobs as a pillow...later in the day he called me Nikki. I guess i'm not fully over it so i guess i could try to get over it...this helped some. Tell me what you think.


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    Salty tears flow from a river of pain.
    How could it hurt so bad,
    With the simple saying of a name?
    How could you not see?
    I know when you're thinking of her.
    And, Oh, the pain it causes me.
    To know I'll never forever be your baby.
    To hide my feelings, the best I can,
    Since, you'll never stay with me.

    Do you know what I would do.
    Just to have you smile at me,
    Just to get a laugh from you,
    The way you do for her.
    I watched you change right before me.
    Watched the emotions stir.
    I would steal the world away.
    Just for you to look at me the same.
    Even if only for a day.
    I love you.
    No matter what.
    I just hope you love me too.
    There was a time when I once knew.
    I couldnt have been happier,
    This I assure you.

    But times are changing fast.
    Pretty soon, with the never ending fight,
    The love I hold so dear,
    Will be a distant memory in the night.
    Even a memory will cause me pain.
    For reliving our love in my mind.
    Just wont be the same.
    So please sweetie, who I love so.
    Do me a favor.
    And never let me go.




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      The title was a perfect fit for this. I know what you mean about having a love that is so strong then you just see it changing slowly at first then all of a sudden it hits thats when it gets to you but even when you know things are going wrong and you know that person my leave any second that love and commitment has become such a strong and signifigant thing that you don't want to let it go so you stay even with the hurt just to see if that person would change and everything will go back to normal... The you relaise it wont and even if things turn around they will never be the same because you have already seen the pain he can cause just by leaving. This is a great sotry that i think happens in everybodys life sooner or later thats good when you can relate to a poem it allows you to drift back and remember and feel, it brings back even the malice that you never wanted to feel. Its well written and i enjoyed it. Thank you i will be back for more.
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      hunny, i would tell him goodbye and never look back, he should of never of lied to you and even if they are "just friends", sense when do you use your friends tites as a pillow? but as for the poem, i love the wording behind it, i still stick to my saying, you can express your feelings in words but not as good as poetry, dump him and leave him he is nto worth your time.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by in_a_trap | [ Reply to This ]
      Let that one go, girl.
    Even if he didn't actually physically cheat, lying about where he was, calling you by HER name? Oh hell no.
    I know it hurts now, but once you see past the pain you will see a better road. You deserve better. You deserve to be someone's first and only love. Great write,
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      i fully inderstand where you are coming from, My boyfriend broke up with me yesterday. He told me it isn't me it's him and that he doesn't deserve me right now, and he loves me but doesn't want to be with me because he feels that he needs time, how do a person tell me just two days ago that he loves me and we will be together forever, but a day later tells me he needs time to think whether or not he wants to be with me, i am beginning to believe that he never really did love me and it was a ll a big joke/game. But as much as i love him and fel like i can't go on without him i know that i don't need to be with him because he's bringing me down. you need to realize this too.as hard as it may be love can't hurt more than it feels good. need a friend just holla at me!
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Jamie06 | [ Reply to This ]
      ok i have to agree with Li Li, and you know the sad part about it??? its just gonna get worse!

    you are not going to let it go, because you shouldnt! he was keeping something very big from you and you deserve to be with someone who loves you as much as you love him...

    i am kinda going through a situation where someone i let go, came back...and he DID IT AGAIN! he hurt me again...if he does it once honey he will never change that much...and he is only a man, and not to be worshiped... you should let HIM go...its never easy, but sometimes its just what we NEED to do for ourselves...

    good luck honey

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      NOOOOOOO! Let him let you go girl! You don't want him pulling on your chain every now and then! This man...the one that CHEATED on you...is a fcking JERK! Seriously!

    Why do us women have to have such soft hearts and souls...then us women that do...get walked on and abused. It's hard to get over a man that you put your whole being into. I had one that I actually have a child by.

    Within the last few months I have come to self realization that by me allowing myself to keep loving him...I am actually in the long run destroying myself. I shouldn't be worried about a man that is with another...worrying about him while he's LAID up with another. It's time for me to focus on me.

    Just as...it's time for you to focus on you. If you have this beauty inside to love someone SO deeply...then it should be enjoyed by a person that can return that same love.

    Keep your head up. If ever you need a shoulder...I am here.

    Much love,

    li li
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one heck of a write
    You are saying to us your readers that you have given up on this Love and our Hoping that your man will see just how much he means to you without your heart in the relationship
    This is not easy to do
    I admire your courage
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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