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    dots Submission Name: Poetic Winddots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPoetic Winddots

    The wind picked up in gusts
    A cool breeze carrying away forbidden lust.
    Zephyr caresses a broken soul
    Streaming through an alley in unbreakable flow.
    Lifting up a single blank paper
    Dancing with the help of invisible vapor.
    The tablet whips with the wind
    It curves, folds, and bends.
    Now, ink begins to rain down
    Pelting the paper to the ground.
    Penned by thoughts downpour
    Imaginations process, Poet's Lore.
    Deuterscopy behind the rain
    Vertex met petro-stain.
    Words filling up the page's brim
    Creativity grows from who I am.

    Submitted on 2004-04-28 15:29:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very good great write and enjoyable read
    when reading i like to ty a put myself in the story as well as the writer
    thanx fo your comment on my child not sue if you liked it but thanx
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      it just intruigues me how much i can relate to your wiriting! the metaphores of wind and vapores relating to the imagination process was very unique and intense! thanks for the comments on loathe the dawn also. i promise i will writw about some real life expiriences, but my dreams right now just seem to consume me
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      Great description of the paper coming to rest. You added so much movement and imagery in a delightful manner. I really liked the invisible vapor. Very unique.
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved the sense that I was seeing the movement in this - the last line was a greta conclusion, and I liked the line "Penned by thoughts downpour." I like it because you tie together the line with the raining ink and all...it's just a good thought.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]

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