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    dots Submission Name: Continuitydots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
    Total Views: 813
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 87



    Description:
       Poetry dot com provides an opportunity to participate in their Haiku contest. They share an inspirational picture and you whip something up. So...I was making it a daily habit...hoping to win the hundred bucks! How shocked I was to find that I qualified within the winning time frame...and was actually chosen as the winner! It wasn't until they sent me an e-mail to confirm my addy et al, that I discovered...no...it wasn't a hundred bucks at all...it was...of all things...a mouse pad! LOLOL! The hundred bucks was for another contest. Oh well...they did imprint my Haiku on it! Thought I'd share...along with the inspirational picture...


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    dotsContinuitydots
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    As the shallow wind
    whispers through the vacant wood,
    time continues on.




    Submitted on 2006-01-19 13:35:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This really is the finest 'traditional' haiku i've seen here at elite. The syllable count is spot-on wtihout seeming forced. The expression is most remarkable. Simple...yet with a kernel of thought...which leaves a lingering impression in the reader's mind.

    Very nicely done. A pleasure to read.
    later,
    kc
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this haiku, but I don't like the word "gentle". The picture does reflect a sense of time a width, but I don't think that the word gentle fit's into it.

    However the poem leaves a sort of "miling" expression. :-)
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Yara Lorinda | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of sent shivers up my spine. Like, really really good shivers. Though, I kind of feel like I'm gonna die earlier now. I thought it was funny your Description was longer then the poem. LoL, sorry. I really liked it though. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Secrets Unheard | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Kimmy,
    First congrats on your winning! It's a start.

    Now for your write, I am a sucker for Haikus.
    I love them. They are gentle, serene and poetic in it's own right. Yours meet all standards for a Haiku. You really have to apply when writing one. Even though it is short it has to reflect. Your words are well chosen to express the pic. A well written Haiku. Keep on keeping on!lol take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, it is hard to comment on haihu...but i do like this...and i also think that you could turn this into something else more than a haiku. sounds like a good beginning to something else
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought that your poem really reflected the pic well. Its hard to comment on Haiku poetry I find because of its length, but I would enjoy looking down at my mouse pad and getting to read that poem HaHA. So yeah thats about all.
    Rosh
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by Rosh_5 | [ Reply to This ]


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