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    dots Submission Name: Asomatous weavingdots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsAsomatous weavingdots

    Asomatous weaving nothingness of our soul. We are virtuosos of immeasurable recalcitrant ordain only captured in thought. A fleshless soul consumed by ideas flowing swiftly into thine mind's eye. An eye that can not hope to view all but understand more than its owner. Thus, the owner must learn the function and ability of their own self. Must learn the adaptability of the soul. Unlock doors that have never been opened is the hardest part of knowing oneself as a paradigm of enlightenment. This is the path of our greatest thinkers not too merely know something but to understand therefore in understanding can look at an idea at all available angles. Also, not a single soul thinks the same and that's the beauty of everything. Take from it what you will and create with unlimited angles.

    Asomatous- having no material body.

    Submitted on 2004-04-28 15:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      (you have some verb tense issues in here, and there's at least one wrong word (too where it should be to*), but that's minor. what isn't minor is the way you twist the language around. i doubt that's how you speak normally... i understand using a particular voice when writing, but you've written this really confusingly... maybe take a look, reread with a fine-toothed comb (or not-so-fine), and just see what you could do without--what might be detracting from the piece. as it is, you're alienating the reader a bit. grammar and normal english structure flew out the window, it seems.)

    We are nothing but thoughts and words and minds. Yes. And your last two sentences are great.

    I like that you left the definition for the ending. It encourages rereading, and I got through the piece fine the first read-through, but the second time, with the definition in mind, made it much clearer.

    | Posted on 2008-06-25 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      I love essays of just as you said, writing to write...I also love learning new words & having to look words up. It's very abstract and I like and agree with many of the statements. I've been reading the essays of Emerson & have confirmed many views I thought mine alone yet shared through the universal soul..it's true what you said of the owner learning the function & ability. Great Job! Look forward to reading more of your thoughts. Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed your outlook and I too think that the uniqueness of our thoughts and words is beautiful. You need to go back and clean up the coding. Sometimes happens when transfering from certain processors. Also Unlock should be unlocking.
    Thanks for sharing your views and adding another fun word to my vocab.
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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