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    dots Submission Name: Sensualdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 1167
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 397



    Description:
       From comments on my poem Experience which few liked as is but a few found Sensual (never has my work been called this!) so just a fun little poem that popped in my head on the way home yesterday...



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    Today's word named
    Sensual
    In river flows
    unusual
    which 2 sum
    lacked
    their brain not
    jacked
    the art of
    rhyme
    a taste in
    thyme
    a pleasure 2
    each
    our support can
    teach
    A lesson of
    Love
    learned within and
    above
    Today's word oozed
    Sensual




    Submitted on 2004-04-28 15:54:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      sensual? hmm, what's wrong with that, it's lovingly erotic, is it not? anyhow, this does seem to have a different sentiment about it, however at least you were happy. this seems like one of those you just took and ran with. i like different and to do so is to expand, alrighty than, bye.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      The slang use took a little getting used to but I did like the entendre of thyme and the way you oozed the words down the page.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      ok... i didn't really like the rhyme, but then again just me...short and sweet. it seemed very random
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]


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