Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sensualdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 1156
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 397



    Description:
       From comments on my poem Experience which few liked as is but a few found Sensual (never has my work been called this!) so just a fun little poem that popped in my head on the way home yesterday...



    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSensualdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Today's word named
    Sensual
    In river flows
    unusual
    which 2 sum
    lacked
    their brain not
    jacked
    the art of
    rhyme
    a taste in
    thyme
    a pleasure 2
    each
    our support can
    teach
    A lesson of
    Love
    learned within and
    above
    Today's word oozed
    Sensual




    Submitted on 2004-04-28 15:54:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      sensual? hmm, what's wrong with that, it's lovingly erotic, is it not? anyhow, this does seem to have a different sentiment about it, however at least you were happy. this seems like one of those you just took and ran with. i like different and to do so is to expand, alrighty than, bye.
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      The slang use took a little getting used to but I did like the entendre of thyme and the way you oozed the words down the page.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      ok... i didn't really like the rhyme, but then again just me...short and sweet. it seemed very random
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    8813

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Carry written by saartha
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Records I written by Raphael
    The World written by jjd
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    prison written by ShyOne
    Shi written by ShyOne
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    Angel Eyes written by poetotoe
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry