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    dots Submission Name: Reninetdots
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    Author: DevilDinosaur
    ASL Info:    28/M/MR American
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 293/197/46
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Short poem about a very old god, one of my first. Can't say I really remember what I was thinking when I wrote it, but the last line really leaves one hanging.


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    Reninet

    Reninet walked the earth when the first child was born
    On the banks of the river Nile,
    She served as protector of children then,
    And kept them safe from the wicked and vile.
    But when Egypt first fell, she fell as well,
    Her temples burned by Nubian Kings,
    And when old gods were restored her faith was ignored
    By those that decide such things.
    But unlike most old gods, she still keeps her faith
    And watches after the young of the earth.
    Though her power has waned since Pharaohs had reigned,
    Her faith will soon undergo a rebirth...




    Submitted on 2004-04-28 16:23:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I always enjoy mythological characters and the ancient ones. Reninet seems like such a loving an beneficial goddess that she would remain steady in her tasks even though she has been forgotten and remains faithful even as she is unappreciated.

    I like how you leave us wondering at the end if this will all turn about. WIll the goddess finally be remembered for her vigils over the young?

    Nice!
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont understand it, where are you going with it? you tell historical facts but thats it. it was very interesting though, i learned smething new today
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    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by ove | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. It is strong and boldly said. Is this the egyptian hippopotamus Goddess? I think I may have heard of her. However, I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme, you kept to it well throught. Good work
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it
    but i have no clue who Reninet is/was
    the history mixed in was different
    and sorta intresting
    its quid
    | Posted on 2004-04-28 00:00:00 | by SHEslaysME | [ Reply to This ]


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