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Dynamite


Author: Trifecta
ASL Info:    14.male.Somewhere
Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 32 /34 /28
Words: 180
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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Oh snap, this one is really, and I mean really, old. I found it on my computer and think it's actually kinda cool, especially since it was one of my early works, so it's kinda fun to look back on it and see how I was doing back then. Thoughts, criticism, praise, etc... all welcome.


Dynamite



Dont you know, you're just a cannibal
Cutting down ones like yourself
Just to satisfy your hunger
Nobody can trust you, yet they rely on you
Everybody knows of your blood-thirsty ways
But nobody can survive without following the leader
Well, I've had enough

BOOM!
You've got a serious problem now
BOOM!
You're gonna meet the reaper now
BOOM!
Nobody wants to follow the leader now

You're gonna die without a trace
Brace yourself it could happen anytime
Every second I'm watching
Every time you move, I see
Say goodbye to the future

BOOM!
You've got a serious problem now
BOOM!
You're gonna meet the reaper now
BOOM!
Nobody wants to follow the leader now

Miss all of it already?
That kind of behavior wont be tolerated in Hell

BOOM!
You've got a serious problem now
BOOM!
You're gonna meet the reaper now
BOOM!
Nobody wants to follow the leader now

BOOM!
You've got a serious problem now
BOOM!
You're gonna meet the reaper now
BOOM!
Nobody wants to follow the leader now




Submitted on 2006-01-19 21:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cool! This one has some power to it, for sure. The one thing I would change is to add more verses in with the chorus. Give it even more substance and bite, then you would REALLY have something!
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by blueeyes | [ Reply to This ]


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