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    dots Submission Name: introduction to life verse 4dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Society
    Total Views: 963
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1694



    Description:
       last verse. thanx for reading fellas. and ladies of course. u know i love the ladies


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    dotsintroduction to life verse 4dots
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    This is my introduction to life—some undergo destruction by knife
    All the cutting, they slice wrists outta spite
    This is no laughing matter, the shit happens for real
    Sex appeal fills pockets—let a brotha cop a feel for a meal
    It’s amusing—when you sit back and think all the VDs prostitution’s producing
    Tearing through the protection you’re using
    Is this the right direction you’re choosing?
    So the hooker goes to the clinic to get an abortion
    Life isn’t clear, it’s just a jumbled distortion
    Parents argue, fight so now they end up divorcing
    No remorse in this river of blood coursing
    The mission’s a failure, so I guess I’m aborting
    We used to worry about all the coke we’re importing
    But we’re too busy burying soldiers and everyone’s mourning
    Blood spilled on Iraqi soil—Marines slain over oil
    They say dying is a part of their job
    Blacks can’t find jobs—so we resort to organized crime like the mob
    Crack dealers on corners—selling to an addict named Sandra
    War along borders leads to even more death and disorder
    We need less theft and reporters representing this sort of
    Agony in this day and this age
    Just let the peace spread, like the ink on this page

    In a deep slumber, I can’t wake from this dream
    Why kill each other, over oil under streams?
    We’re all brothers, no matter your color
    I believe that we’ve done enough harm
    So please lay down your arms
    Suffering from concussions from fights
    No more darkness, get in touch with the light
    This is my introduction to life




    Submitted on 2006-01-19 22:11:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is another amazing end..wow this just summed up your point pretty intensly. sorry I really feel wierd and am master of sucky comments right now but I really liked this one and just wanted to comment cause it was really good I Just can't think of what else to say...take care.~
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      *clears throat* This one was good. I mean it followed up the other three lyrics and finished it off perfectly. I still liked the first one the best..then this one..then the second one, then the third one..( i confuse myself sometimes.) But this was good. Keep up the good work.

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was so good, I introduced it to one of my fellow classmates...hope you dont mind. Do you wanna know what they said?
    They said they coul;dnt beleive it, how good you are and how much talent you have, they wish more people like you were recognized.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      yay! hey troy! how is troy? yay again im ur first commenter! hehe! well this aint gonna help cuz im really tired i like this one a lot! but on all da verses da 1ST ONE! waz da best! good job keep it uP!
    ~akaila~
    GO TO SCHOOL AND LEARN STUFF!(cuz i aint)
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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