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Submission Name: Torn dots

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Author:	StevenJay
ASL Info:	21, Male, Chicago
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 27/36/14
Words:	177

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	253
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1079

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Torn

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Torn between my heart and my thoughts
Feelings twisting around in a tornado of confusion
Both sides seem right when only one
Can fix my situation
A broken heart that needs mending,
Tapping together the red and blue veins that somehow
Continue to keep pumping the cold dark blood
That warms a body that feels so cold,
Sewing back the caverns that allow me to breath
Scream
Cry
Feel the dagger that has been jammed deep
Into the heart that beats for you,
I’ve given up everything and now I’m lost
Among the tears that stain my face and burn my eyes that once longed to see you,
Searching everywhere for the answers on how to cure my pain
How to forget the one thing I can’t live without
The one thing that allows my heart to keep beating
What never dies seems to live in the shadows like me
I’m here yet unseen,
Buried by the shovel that covers my heart
My heart that longs for you
Even though you’re the one to blame.

Submitted on 2006-01-19 23:26:55 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Buried by the shovel that covers my heart, great line steven, the emotions were really running deep in this poem I'm glad you shared it with all of us at eliteskills ,keep tapping those keys
adnil
| Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow...That was probibly one of the best writes I have ever seen. I'm almost at a loss for words, seeing as how nothing I could say can bring it justice. I'm glad you asked me to read your writing, this is definately going on my favorites. I really feel somewhat stunned. The sheer beauty of it seems to have caught me off-gaurd. Excellent, excellent write!

Forever,
Lilithe
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Lilithe_Aislin | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel that this piece of poetry explains more than whats been putted in words. the deep emotions thats flows within this writing... hope, hidden beneath all tragic loss and confusion. Whether or not its has given whats was at stake, its been teared upon many pieces which you finds its hard to take. While trying to mend your heart still belongs to him/her but how can u still love someone thats hurt you this bad? the question in this poetry is just questioning yourself if its worth the question of why...
-Alveda
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Alveda | [ Reply to This ]
  I undertsand this write
You are in my opinion speaking of a Love that is so strong and you feel your love is not being reciprocated
Some people show Love in different Ways
They just seem afraid to say I Love You or show There Love
But believe if you liik deep at this situation you will find the Love that Has been Reciprocated
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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