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    dots Submission Name: Opposition in All Thingsdots
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    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Not sure what I'm looking for in terms of comments. It's just sort of a random write that developed of its own accord. Have fun!


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    dotsOpposition in All Thingsdots
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    Sugar and spice,
    Sickness and health,
    Dead and quick.
    Realization is slow,
    Wisdom slower.
    Knowing imperfection,
    Gives one perfection.
    Fear feeds bravery,
    Humility breeds pride.
    Love and indifference,
    Hate and lust.
    Understanding brings confusion,
    Knowledge lights ignorance.
    Longing for peace
    Leads to war.




    Submitted on 2006-01-20 04:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Almost sounds like some truths to life...you start off sweet and end with war...could have named this "Off Balance!" Not a bad write...I read it over a couple of times...it's just one of those things that speaks for itself...no rhyme...so no beats lost...all in all, a nice fluent read. Thanks for sharing!
    Kimmy
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]


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