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    dots Submission Name: Gamesdots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Bytes: 386



    Description:
       Just slightly ticked off- thats all..... (I'll get over it) not quite sure where the question mark should go here- but it seems like it should be there somewhere- any suggestions.....


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    dotsGamesdots
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    Do you like to play games?
    I know that you do...
    Like saying "I love you"
    when you know its not true.

    Your sweet declaration:
    "I miss you so much"
    just another part of you
    I can never touch

    I'm not so jaded,
    I know what you do-
    but did you know...
    I like to play too?




    Submitted on 2006-01-20 09:04:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I knew. But, for the record, I never said it without meaning it. Hell, I love you even now; believe it or no.
    | Posted on 2013-04-17 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooo, that is sort of creepy in a wicked and gorgous way. I like to play, too? Watch the hell out, mister, cause you have no idea what you are dealing with here! I likey very much!

    IK
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Short and sweet, makes a point. The ending verse I like a lot. Can't think of a word to describe it. Witty? Maybe. Ok, I'll go with that. I can relate, I know what it's like to feel like your boyfriend/girlfriend is playing games with you. It hurts a lot, and it's frustrating, because sometimes you can't be sure. I actually think you should keep the question mark there, but get rid of the "...."
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by DrunkOnShadows | [ Reply to This ]
      Just loved it! I know how that goes sometimes.. Not the words "I love you" but all the words and actions that make you feel that way, and well he never comes out with the stand! Keeps you guessing and well you want to play too. When I play I hope for a positive result... either get to him so that he will stop messing with me or get him to take things to a different level. I heard a great thing the other day that really sticks in my mind... and well maybe it does not apply... I just wanted to share it..
    "Just because he baits the hook doesn't mean that you have to bite."

    Monica
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]
      yea i agree, question mark at the end of the last sentence...

    you know sometimes its game playing and sometimes, its stupidity...they may not realize it now, but eventually they will see what they did to you...doesnt offer much comfort now, but just know the satisfaction will be yours in the end...

    take care

    -nikki
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really interesting write
    Love is not a game
    Love is a real heartfelt emotion that needs to be taken delicately
    Just because someone is playing games with Love dosent mean you have to do the same
    We need to learn to forgive and move on
    How can playing the same game help you in moving forward in life
    A very good and thought provoking write
    Take Care
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh, heh...I liked this and the ending was very funny...but then again, I have a twisted sense of humor. Hee-hee! Sometimes that "L" word gets thrown around too often, ya know? Some people actually take it seriously and not in a childlike 'game' way. Short and sweet. I think you should move the ? you have at the end of the second to last line down to the last line. It just seems to fit better there.
    Nice write and thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      last stanza put the question mark at the end of the last sentence...

    other then that I really liked this short piece...

    It kind of made me cringe though because I know a lot of people that have probably said this about me...

    especially the second stanza...

    Hang in there...dont let one persons issues affect your vision of love...sometimes us good girls just have things we have to work through before we can give 100%

    Tink
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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