Look at u being all inspirational and whatnot. Very proud of you. I liked this one and I hope you keep it up because evoulution is always a good thing. Luv ya mami!
Thank you for the dedication. I have not lost the sight of light its just that darkness has been overpowering me and it sometimes makes me forget that I am alive, that I am awake. Thank you for motivating me. Your poem was inspiring. It is time to wake up and play our part. There is no point of living if we are not going to live. I really enjoyed your poem. Thanks for the dedication and for the great read.
Andrea, I love it! You have really become a great writer we all have (J.A.M... and Ana... lol). The only think I could say about this poem to make it better is maybe grammer. Other than that, muy bien!
i liked this in a way. actually, i liked it very much. i could see some kind of sad melancholia in it, though i got the picture that this is saying "hey, wake up, it was just a bad dream, everything's ok really". the poem was somehow confusing, it felt like you were rushing through it and sometimes it was like you'd jumped over some subject and the whole system, the balance would've been breaking. it wasn't too original and it wasn't really thought through, but it smelled fresh;>
This is a bit of a sad poem, and it did make me think a bit, it made me feel sad for your friend. This is a nice poem, but I think you could of used some better words, like the reusage of storm, and light, but overall it was a really good poem, and I hope your friends get better, and the poem really did have good points in the fact that the theme is very good to write about because some people don't realize that their not the only person in the world, and what they do affects everyone else, so this is a good job. Peace and love, Aya
I actually liked your poem quite a bit, it was depressing and yet also had an undercurrent of inspiration running through it. I don't personal agree with all of the lines, but I am not here to comment on content, your poem had good flow and creative condictions. There is also an urgency that seems to propel the poem forward. The theme risks being overused but overall it was a good read. Rosh
not entirely sure what the last stanza has to do with the rest of the poem. it makes it sound like your in a play and its about a storm that has passed. its strange, but overall i like it. there were a few grammer mistakes, but nothing major. maybe you should change the description so the reader doesn't get confused.
Submission Name: Wake up
