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    dots Submission Name: Passerbydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 699
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       I don't know. I wrote it and it's mine and you can tell what it is about, like how dependant the girl is on him, whatever.

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    i passed your house, where maybe you lay dreaming
    at night- in your room
    i passed the river of singing streams
    i passed the moon on his way to sleep

    or rather, you passed me
    and I quivered
    when you went by-
    a cool draft followed at your heels

    since then, it's been only days, and yet
    seems to be a year or more
    since then I have sat here waiting at your door
    for you to pass me

    Submitted on 2006-01-20 12:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hate being dependent like this. It can hurt if the other person doesn't feel the same way. Know what I mean? It shows character of me.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful. This is the stuff that you write that I like to read. Maybe cause it's always about some neurotic girl that does things the way that I do them... Isn't that insane?
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice one. It paints a picture of teenage love and is very refreshing in it's approach. Although it can possibly be said that the thought wasn't followed up with writing too clearly, I appreciate the attempt.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]

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