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    dots Submission Name: Mr. McFiddledots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is silly but I hate it when people make fun of people because of social differences and the like.


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    dotsMr. McFiddledots
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    he withdrew they say
    the night his lady lay in peace
    put foolish things away
    and all follly finally ceases

    he sits in a window they whisper
    reading by candlelight
    he's only reading! they laugh
    and joke and point out of spite

    so many tales they tell
    I only hope he doesn't hear
    long and skinny and dreadfully pale
    behind his back they call him queer

    and when he walks into town
    women gossip and ladies giggle
    I stand back and always frown
    I just don't know why they laugh at Mr. Mcfiddle
    stupid heads they should drown





    Submitted on 2006-01-20 12:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This si cute and wonderfully detailed, but the line "stupid heads they should drown" makes it seen more of a less matur poema nd ruins the flow. But I lov ehow you explain about this man and how there are people who treat others so poorly. Wonderfully done.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww...it sort of made me want to cry. I loved this poem and I agree 100% with it. It makes me want to find this Mr. McFiddel and hug him. Poor fellow...
    People make me mad. Stupid people. And as you said, they should drown.
    But about the poem it's self... I liked the wording of everything, in my head I saw a town in the 1800's and a tall skinny fellow (that insidently looked like that fellow from sleepy hollow) just troping throught the gates to town...and then all the ladies whispering and giggeling.
    So my point, very good imagry. This poem had great structure. Very good job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      I get sad when people pick on or mistreat others because they are different. Differences are what make us unique. Bravo to those that have the courage to be themselves and bravo to help stick up for others.
    Good!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the meaning behind this and it's funny in a sense...but then it's sort of depressing. It's only depressing because I can relate.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece. Indeed it is not desirable that people should put down others just because they're different. There's a very good quote in this regard, "You laugh because i'm different. I laugh because you're all the same". Keep expressing yourself.
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]


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