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Something to Think about


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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okay i wrote this for Johnathon..i love him to death and we've been dating for a month. I'm still a virgin btw. Its something to deal with mind sex you know having sex but not really..you'll get it after about three poems. But anways i let my friends read it and it took them a while to get it. It's like envision you telling this to someone you like..love or whatever, on a umm...sex level? I let some guys read it and..lets just say it proved why i don't date guys my age or younger. but anyways tell me what you think.


Something to Think about



Think about this when your away
first envision me wearing...
your t-shirt..i'll envision you
wearing just sweat pants
on a hot summer day
sweat glisting down your chest
you reach for me..you kiss me
i taste like honey..
your lips taste like strawberries
you take your T shirt of my body
kiss my neck as i pull down
your sweat pants
finally we're both naked
you lay me on a bed
then you..enter me slowly
making me moan..lust just for you
still kissinhg my body
you move in and out
going deeper each time
my moans become screams of pleasure
my walls tighten around you
you feel it coming
i feel it coming
we close our eyes
as it comes at the same time
then you exit me
lay next to me
and hold me.....
nice thought huh?




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  wow. this was really good. it's gonna be another fave and i can see why ur friends reacted weirdly to this. it seems kinda like porn with words though. if it wasn't for the description, i'd have just thought u were describing u having sex with ur bf
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Very detailed and I love this poem. I like how it really expresses the thoughts your having and well the imagery is wonderful as well. I myself have been with my boyfriend for almost a year now and he was my first so i know how yoru mind is racing not knowing what to think for I was there. The thing is, don't dwell on it so much. The time comes on it's on and unexpected don't plan it. That your relationship flow and the times comes when it does. I love this poem very wonderful and detailed.
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
  Very detailed, it seems like a very short story. If you add more adjectives, I think it would really pull a reader into it.
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Scarlett Rose | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting, and detalied. It took like 2 times to fullyunderstand it thorught. you could amybe change something to make it more understandable.
~sweetme
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]


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