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Dark Chains

Author: Tom110989
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I wrote this a few weeks ago. Sometimes these feelings just come up and I try to write them down as good as possible. I wasn't very happy at the moment when I wrote this. But even sad things can be good. And I always feel better after writing.
I hope you liked it.

Dark Chains

Dark Chains

The dark chains were keeping his prisoner captive
Both arms were chained to the wall
And his feet to the ground
He was chained for as long as he could remember
People were passing by, not looking at the guy
They only saw the shadows
They didn’t have the courage to come near
The guy was hanging weakly in the chains
Like he had no hope or strength left
But it hasn’t always been like this
There were days when he was standing
With hope that the day of release would be near
And yes, there were people who saw him
And tried to rescue him from the chains
But they all failed …
Like the chains decided that they were not the right person
To set the guy free
So he has been waiting in the shadows
For as long as he could remember
For someone
To set him free …

Submitted on 2006-01-20 15:29:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A struggle to be seen and to be freed from pain and sadness is what I understand of it. If that is the meaning then it is wonderful. Kind of like me a few years ago, still a little bit now too though. It is great. :)
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Tied2AHateSoul | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow this one's depressing too! JK. i like this too. CHALLANGE: write a happy poem before next weekend! no nevermind -thats not how creativity works. NEW CHALLANGE: write a new piece before next weekend that focuses on the journey from despair to hope (that sounds corny but hey- i'm the challanger here!- i can do what i want!) the piece dosen't have to be hopeful, maybe the journey has completly failed, but thinking about moving to happiness might help.
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  Dark feelings. You have done a superb job of describing exactly what you feel here.
As i read through i could of almost been the man in chains.
And i have been there in the past, and it's not a nice place to be, this i know.
When you feel like you nothing to hope for and anything you do hope for will never come anyway.
But just after christmas this year i decided that it was only me who could save my life from a never ending circle of pain and self pity ( I'm not suggesting that you are pitying yourself). so i picked myself up, went to my old employer and told them i would like my job back, they accepted. I got in contact with an ex that i had treated quite badly in the feelings department, although and i know it's no excuse i was so down i just didn't want to drag her down with me, and I proclaimed my love for her and she is currently in the process of moving back in with me!
So all i'm trying to say is that although you feel like there is no hope, there is, go grab yourself a little something that you want, and all the rest fits into place and you can wear your long lost smile once again.

Anyway i have totally gone into a verbal barage of my life that's past..

Great thought provoking piece, and i truly hope that you find all you are looking for and never feel this low again

Chin up eh?

Poetic Darkness
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by PoeticDarkness | [ Reply to This ]
  deep. i like what you've done. most other stuff i see here is words with emotions behind them, but what you've done is fused the emotions into the words, and i see some hard times behind those words. keep writting, but at the time, keep hope. i used to feel how you do or did during this poem, and then i turned to God. he picked me up and gave me a big hug. i can still write about the hard times, have depth behind them, but i can keep hope at the same time. I dont know if you have a religion or some other comforting source, but i recomend that after you write something like this, you turn to it to bring yourself back up.
keep hope and keep it coming.
| Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by L0RIN | [ Reply to This ]

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