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Author:	jermwerm
ASL Info:	26/m/FRESNO CA
Elite Ratio:	4.29 - 203/268/83
Words:	90

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	874
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This was a writting challange in the fourems that asked if we could write a poem that used oppisites.

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I’ll show you a poem thats veiled to all,
speaking of secrets without speaking at all.
I will throw you these words as my hand holds them tight,
bringing dimmed peace that leaves with our light.
you may ask me why bother?
I’m told I am dead.
you will silense with poster,
screaming I’ve lived.
these words were so fast,
as it slowers our thoughts.
this will freeze in the desert,
it will burn in the frost.

Submitted on 2006-01-21 03:19:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Obviously you intended this merely to meet the challenge, but the second half of the write is quite good (and worth revision and expansion as a separate work). The best poetry ever written is ambiguous enough to cause the reader to think (and consequently link polar opposites into startling images worth asecond read). Keep writing, and challenging yourself as you do so. Take care. Bill.
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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