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    Author: InfiniteSxE
    ASL Info:    16/Female/Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 329
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    Darkness surrounds me, pain is all I feel,
    Like I'm drowning in the air I breath, is any of it real?
    Emotions overcome me, I cut but don't feel the pain,
    This is the storm of my life, my tears are the rain.

    People all around me, hurrying to pass me by,
    While I'm stuck in this moment, slowly waiting to die.
    The one's I love seem to always go away,
    It's just not fair...why do they leave and I stay?

    Life's full of joy and happiness...or so they say,
    No one ever wants to talk about the corruption and the pain.
    If the world is so perfect...then why do I want to leave?
    If everything is expected...than why do I cover my arms with sleeves?

    Does it scare you to see the marks of my fears?
    When you see these cuts do you realise my tears?
    I just need someone to tell me that they really care,
    To say those three words back...one love to share.

    I stand in a crowded room and yet I stand alone,
    I live in a house, it's not a home.
    No one could feel the way that I do,
    I loved you so much now look what you do.

    The thought of your touch, the vision of your smile,
    It drives me to do this! It drives me wild...
    Just say those words that you love me again,
    I'll put down the blade and never cut again.

    I lay in the water alone and free,
    As the warm temped water surrounds me.
    The water is so warm, yet I feel so cold,
    Like my soul is being taken...for your love it's been sold.

    Once again I'm wrapped up in your warm and loving arms,
    Away from the reality and cruelty of life's harms.
    I see all my loved ones that have passed me by,
    It has come to this...for your love I died.





    Submitted on 2006-01-21 12:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      In the second stanza, your rhyming flow is a little off, but otherwise, this is such a beautiful poem. =] keep up the good work, and welcome =]
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Yclipse | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, its a really deep poem. While i was reading this, i was totally feeling all the pain. I've felt like this before, but i hope you knw that if someone lives you they won't want you to die. good job though
    ~sweetme
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]



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