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Submission Name: Wasted dots

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Author:	encognyto
ASL Info:	26/M/Louisiana
Elite Ratio:	3.02 - 27/36/14
Words:	48

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	210
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	332

Description:
going back trhough some of the older stuff i have written...

Wasted

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a crackhead in the alley
lies in a puddle of his own wastes;
wasted life, wasted dreams,
a wasted existence...
he lives his dreams through a glass pipe;
slowly sucking away at his essence,
blowing off his potential
in a cloud of white smoke...

copyright 1999 encognyto

Submitted on 2006-01-21 13:07:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "He lives his dreams through a glass pipe, slowly sucking away at his essence and blowing off his potential"-Great imagery and a wise use of words-I also like the fact you didn't need ten verses to say it-Good work Dude-Mugs-
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the lenght of this myself. An addict is never in one place all the time. Their life is very much like their thought pattern, fleeting moments of awareness and pleasure. You explained in a wonderful way how the drugs were wasting this person, in more ways than one. I loved the imagery, the raw edge to this. GREAT JOB!

Maggie
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  This really caught the emotion of an addicts life. They only care about their next high and somehow deep into the poem you captured that. If I were you I would elaborate on this more, and talk about the different addictions, like drinking, meth, cutting, something to that extent. This was really good though, and I am looking forward to reading more of your work!
Alyssa
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]

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