I hate you by Rozie

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Submission Name: I hate you dots

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Author:	Rozie
Elite Ratio:	2.47 - 2/2/2
Words:	129

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	164
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	726

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When we hate the one we love.

I hate you dots

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I hate you.
You’ve consumed your way inside of me like a parasite that’s feeding on my guts.
You watch me as I hurt, loving every minute of it.
I hate you.
Making me toss and turn with this burning inside of me that only other lovers can relate to.
A burning that feels so real that it’s as though you’re literally taking chunks out of my inside.
I hate you.
For keeping me hoping, wanting, yearning for those feelings you once unleashed.
Like no person has experienced before.
I hate you.
For making me love you so deeply that I never thought possible.
To a degree that is so great that only God can understand it.
I hate you

Submitted on 2006-01-21 13:33:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this poem alot because love is a crazy thing and hate is always attacted. i think the poem could have been alittle bit more organized and have more structure but all and all it was good.
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by shotxgunxsinner | [ Reply to This ]
  :) Thanks Lorna.. You know I wrote this in ten minutes! Hehe. I couldn't sleep, so I got out of bed wrote it and then I slept like a baby! It's amazing how writing can help alleviate stress!

Thanks for the tip. I'm not a writer as such, but I will definately take your opinion onto board.
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Rozie | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! This is some angry stuff you got here. Ya know, I can relate to this one. I think anyone who has been in love with someone can really relate to this love/hate thingy. Not that I understand how you could love and hate the same person, cause if you think about it, it really doesnt make any sense, but it happens and it really sucks too. I like the expression of feelings this has. You have certainly vented yourself all over the place here. And very direct and to the point. If I were to make a suggestion it would have to be the format here. You could write this one with a better form and perhaps break up the long lines into shorter ones such as this:

You’ve consumed your way
inside of me like a parasite
that’s feeding on my guts

This way it just looks better overall instead of having those long lines sticking out everywhere. And I must say, that line there almost makes me laugh. hee hee! That is some serious anger and bad feelings going on there. haha! Nice poem. Take care and Welcome to Elite.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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