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Author: Meotoko
ASL Info:    18/f/malta
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 46 /62 /38
Words: 264
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Dreaming of you, regardless,
of time, place, or importance.
Thoughts of you find a way, regardless,
of reality, fantasy, or imagination.
Wanting to be with you, regardless,
of family, friends, or society.
Needing you, only you, regardless,
of dreams, thoughts, or wants.
Love for you lingers, regardless,
of what is accepted, right, or wrong.

You dream of another, periodically.
You think of another, constantly.
You want another, regularly.
You need another, vivaciously.
You love another, ceaselessly.
My dreams nothing in this game
My thoughts insignificant in this pastime
My wants inferior in this contest
My needs nonessential in this entertainment
My love unimportantly meaningless
For this competition of a hopeless love.
Regardless of Me.

Submitted on 2006-01-21 13:54:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really liked your poem. It's written in a very different style, but it works well for this one. I wouldn't change it. Your love and frustration both come through here.
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]
  i thought this might be a good song. i guess your this person is constantly on your mind. i like to see more shape in your poem. maybe by rhyming or something, or shorting down the lines
| Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]

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